请教作文
我想请教一下，如果开头结尾照搬范文，思想也差不多，但是例子不一样，会被当作抄袭么？就像下面一篇一样，红字是抄范文的。因为8月4号就考了，所以比较紧张。谢谢各位了！:loveliness:
[size=12pt][font=Times New Roman][/font][/size]
[color=red][size=12pt][font=Times New Roman]Do current luxuries and conveniences serve to undermine our true strength and independence as individuals? The speaker claims so, and I tend to agree.[/font][/size]
[/color][size=12pt][font=Times New Roman][/font][/size]
[font=Times New Roman][color=red][size=12pt]Consider first how[/size][/color][size=12pt] the new technology [color=red]has diminished our independence in a number of significant respects.[/color] For supporting examples, one needs look no further than the cell-phone. [color=red]Most people consider it a necessity instead of a luxury; yet it is for this very reason that the cell-phone so effectively supports the speaker’s point.[/color] We’ve grown dependent on cell-phones, with which we take whenever and wherever we go out, for communicating with others. Moreover, the cell-phone has become a means not only for communication but also to the attainment of our socioeconomic goals, insofar as the cell-phone has become a symbol of status. In fact, in my observation, many, if not most, young people willingly suffer the pain of having little to eat by the end of month for the sake of having a fashionable expensive cell-phone with high technology and fabulous appearance. As for the other technologies, the housewife is unable to cook well without a cooker; the student is unable to write a resourceful essay without the Internet; the worker is unable to work on time without a car sending him from the east of the city to the west.[/size][/font]
[size=12pt][font=Times New Roman][/font][/size]
[font=Times New Roman][color=red][size=12pt]Consider next the overall impact of the modern luxuries on our strength as individuals, by which I mean strength of character, or mettle.[/size][/color][size=12pt] Again, take the instance of cell-phone, through which we play computer games or chat with friends to goof loneliness and by which we simply call parents to relieve homesickness. With it at hand, we seldom have the chance to properly deal with spare time and learn to be independent instead of turning for others. It would be hard-pressed for me to list one way in which the cell-phone enhances one’s inner strength. An even more striking example involves with the air-conditioner, without which people can hardly bear in the heated summer. The endurance of the natural difficulties is an effective way to train people’s strength and will, and that is why the soldiers are fortitudinous than others. However, with the air-conditioners everywhere, people have no idea how difficult life really is, especially for children.[/size][/font]
[size=12pt][font=Times New Roman][/font][/size]
[size=12pt][font=Times New Roman][color=red]To sum up, all the examples mentioned above help illustrate that when a luxury becomes a necessity, it can sap our independence and strength as individuals. Perhaps, our society is better off, on balance, with such “luxuries”, after all, these inventions have created countless jobs, raised our standard of living, and made the world more interesting. Nevertheless, by becoming slaves to them, we trade off a certain independence and inner strength.[/color][/font][/size]
[[i] 本帖最后由 olivia1104 于 2008-7-4 10:53 编辑 [/i]]
页:
[1]