2008大作文第一期(页 1) - 研究生考试 - 太傻超级论坛

rosecat1014 发表于 2008-7-22 09:40

2008大作文第一期

Write an essay of 160-200 words based on the following drawing. In your essay, you should first describe the drawing, interpret its meaning, and give your comment on it. You should write neatly on Answer Sheet 2. (20 points)

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学生：老师早，股票涨了多少？

sunflower123 发表于 2008-7-23 19:13

这个题目不错哦~~T-h!q4T@-`+MH

大家要动手写，有下资料的时间不如自己认认真真写篇作文。刚开始写可能有点触头，但是这保证了你考试时会一身舒畅~Ftv_&^+Zl
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比如我吧，以前常常参加此节目，考试时作文写的很顺畅。提前半小时就轻松答完了

朵朵家园 发表于 2008-7-23 22:34

考研练习第一篇~
因为以前也没看过考研的作文对格式和写作套路什么的都不清楚~

希望大家多多指教挑毛病啊~~ THE MORE THE BETTER~#CS6QH@Mx {5t7r

[size=10.5pt][font=Times New Roman]This is a picture describe a scene happened in our school life very commonly nowadays. As we can see in the picture, a student and a teacher met with each other one day morning. When the teacher said hi to the student, instead of having a response of saying good morning to his teacher just as the old students do ten years ago in our country, this student made the teacher feel shock because he unexpectedly asked how may points did the stocks raise today. [/font][/size]
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The picture is just like a mirror reflects a phenomenon exists in our modern society that everyone, even students, desires to earn money through the channel of stock market. Some students spend more time in this kind of investigations rather than in there studying. [/font][/size]
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As far as I am concerned, to be students, it’s no doubt that the mainly task for us is to practice our brains by the way of learning knowledge as much as possible in such brief campus life. So, it’s not worthy to spend a lot of time on the stock trading even if it make you earn some money. [/font][/size]
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Besides that, everyone in the stock market should acknowledge that the stock trading is a kind of investigation full of risk that earning money and losing fortune exist simultaneously. So, because of our adolescent still don’t have enough capability to take the risk, the best way for us is to get rid of it.[/font][/size]0E^3F2_0_6DG
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Consider the two points I mentioned, I believe that our student should not take part in the stock trading even if sometime it may make us earn a lot of pocket money. 1_/NCf7t K
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jlucky88 发表于 2008-7-23 23:47

作文一直是我头疼的个问题。
考研作文也没训练过.以前的四六级作文都是按模式来的.
算是硬着头皮写吧. 希望大家能多给建议哈! d3V)dJ3I}9z W%b @

  As is shown in the graph,in a sunny morning,a student come across with his teacher.The teacher said"Hi!",but the student said"Good morning teacher,how much the stock rise?"This phenomen could be seen commonly in the campus life.
  As far as I know,there may be three reasons for this.To begin with,with the development of the level of our life, have more money per month,so we could spend more on our interest! What's more important,the spare time of collage is too much,it cater to the need of stock trading which needs much time.The last but not the least,the collage student could use their knowledge to judge and decide what to buy,which they think it wonderful!
  I hold the strong opinion that we shouldn't spend too much time on this! On the one hand,some students waste too much time as to fail the exams they attended,which is unaccpetable!On  the  other hand,some others spend the money which was used  as the fee.#S\M3U p"E
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rosecat1014 发表于 2008-7-24 00:20

大概看了一下，在不大的修改的前提下挑出来的一些问题：

[quote]原帖由 [i]朵朵家园[/i] 于 2008-7-23 22:34 发表 [url=http://bbs.taisha.org/redirect.php?goto=findpost&pid=12227136&ptid=1094951][img]http://bbs.taisha.org/images/common/back.gif[/img][/url]~$e.O3[y\L
This is a picture [color=red]describe[/color] a scene happened in our school life very commonly nowadays. As we can see in the picture, a student and a teacher met with each other one day morning. When the teacher said [color=red]hi[/color] to the student, instead of [color=red]having[/color] a response of saying [color=red]good morning[/color] to his teacher just as [color=red]the old students[/color] [color=darkorange]do[/color] ten years ago in our country, this student made the teacher feel [color=red]shock [/color]because he unexpectedly asked how may points did the stocks [color=red]raise[/color] today. [/quote]
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1. describe -- describes or describedc#g8l6a Rz/`"J#|
2. hi -- "Hi"(Epk_KH b5G
3. having -- 去掉，这句改为instead of saying "Good morning" ....会不会好一些？
4. good morning -- "Good morning"IXi(@1c,{*E?
5. the old students -- 以前的学生不是这样的说法，以前的用former，但用在这里也感觉不好，用ordinary怎么样？1}T(sj7e A
6. do -- did 10年以前咯，用过去式
7. shock -- shocked shock倒是有形容词的词性，不过是蓬乱的，浓密的意思。/}pm$Ofd
8. raise -- 我查了一下，股票涨用的是advance，所以我不知道raise这个用法是否正确。[font=Trebuchet MS][size=2]His stock advanced ten points. [/size][/font]
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[font=Trebuchet MS][size=2]这一段总的说来还不错，描述了图的内容，但有些地方感觉有些冗余，比如那个met with each other，可以不要with each other[/size][/font]kMQ7_ j:n+K'Q
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[font=Trebuchet MS][size=2][quote][color=red]The picture is just like a mirror reflects a phenomenon exists in our modern society that everyone[/color], even students, desires to earn money through the channel of stock market. Some students spend more time in this kind of investigations rather than in there studying.[/quote][/size][/font]|[B)j!["Fs/K
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[font=Trebuchet MS][size=2] [color=black]The picture [color=red]is[/color] just like a mirror [color=red]reflects[/color] a phenomenon [color=red]exists[/color] in our modern society that everyone 这一句有三个谓语，这在英语里是不可能的[/color][/size][/font]
[font=Trebuchet MS][size=2]修改：[/size][/font][font=Trebuchet MS][size=2]The piture is just like a mirror which reflects the phenomenon in the modern society that everyone, including students, desires to earn money from the stock market. Some students spend much time investigating the stock market rather than in their study.[/size][/font]
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[font=Trebuchet MS][size=2][quote]As far as I am concerned, to be students, it’s no doubt that the mainly task for us is to [color=red]practice our brains[/color] by the way of [color=red]learning knowledge[/color] as much as possible in [color=red]such brief[/color] campus life. So, it’s not worthy to spend a lot of time [color=red]on[/color] the stock trading even if it [color=red]make[/color] you earn some money. [quote][/size][/font]
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[font=Trebuchet MS][size=2]1. practise our brains -- 很别扭啊，make an open mind，或者说keep wise，或者如果非要用锻炼脑筋give the mind some exercise[/size][/font]!u w6X4N8vc6^Q^Y
[font=Trebuchet MS][size=2]2. learning knowledge -- obtaining/getting knowledge 中文说学习知识，但是英文是获得知识，没有learn knowledge这样的说法[/size][/font]B!Ei2gJ6h
[font=Trebuchet MS][size=2]3. in such brief campus life -- 形容词前面用so而不是such，短暂的大学生活用short好一些[/size][/font] b4q)Jg^ F,s
[font=Trebuchet MS][size=2]4. spend a lot of time on --- spend ... in doing sth.[/size][/font]
[font=Trebuchet MS][size=2]5. make -- makes[/size][/font]FeVY0dTa;S$c H
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[font=Trebuchet MS][size=2][quote][color=red]Besides that[/color], everyone in the stock market should acknowledge that the stock trading is a kind of [color=red]investigation[/color] full of risk that earning money and losing fortune exist simultaneously. So, because of our [color=red]adolescent [/color]still don’t have enough capability to take the risk, the best way for us is to [color=red]get rid of[/color] it. [/quote][/size][/font]
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[font=Trebuchet MS][size=2]1. Besides that -- Besides [/size][/font](}e6d?!c#o!x,n S%qF
[font=Trebuchet MS][size=2]2. investigation -- 你是想说investment吧, 后面加which is，然后。。。我重写一下吧: ...the stock trading is a kind of investment which is full of risk--making money as well as losing fortune.[/size][/font]oKw'qvyg
[font=Trebuchet MS][size=2]3. adolescent -- 这个。。。大学生已经成人了。。。::z8 而且也要用复数[/size][/font]eb0Qk(R"U;E*\"Z
[font=Trebuchet MS][size=2]4. get rid of -- 是处理掉的意思，用在这里怎么解释呢？[/size][/font]
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[font=Trebuchet MS][size=2][quote]Consider the two points I mentioned, I believe that our [color=red]student[/color] should not [color=red]take part in[/color] the stock trading even if [color=red]sometime[/color] it may [color=red]make us earn[/color] a lot of [color=black]pocket money[/color]. [/quote][/size][/font]
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[font=Trebuchet MS][size=2]1. student -- students[/size][/font]1Yv6Qz/G b)uAzf n
[font=Trebuchet MS][size=2]2. take part in -- 参加某项活动，进入股票市场参与股票交易用involve in会不会好一些？[/size][/font]
[font=Trebuchet MS][size=2]3. sometime -- adv. 曾经，有一天，你这里应该是sometimes吧[/size][/font]
[font=Trebuchet MS][size=2]4. make us earn -- 既和前面重复，又有些罗嗦，就直接用bring吧[/size][/font]
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[font=Trebuchet MS][size=2]总评：观点是学生应该学习，不应该炒股。但感觉只是说了面没有深入，论据不够充分。此外，有语法错误以及中国英语在里面，我的修改基于你的原文，所以没有做大的改动，你可以看看，再试着重新写一次。[/size][/font]

kingliuice 发表于 2008-7-24 12:11

写作文真是太痛苦了，真是绞尽脑汁也想不出话来呀。 Kt`N]&}#il
希望各位大侠不要嫌弃我的文章，多多提意见。我知道文章太烂。希望经过训练能提高。::z3 (I9~ I:~A3|M

  The picture vividly depicts the talk between a teacher and his student,when they met in the morning.The student asked his teacher the situation of stock instead of study.0^RD"D:f J r
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  As the drawing shows,nowadays many students don't pay attention on how to improve ability of study,but turned to many other places,such as stock,electronic games,and more.This can be attributed to some factors.First of all, with the develop of economy,more and more money is held in the hand of teenager.They use the money  to buy stock.If they have stock,they must be spend time on stock marcket.Secondly,the parents's action influence their children's behavior,so many students focus on stock.There are many others factors,for exmaple,the children may think they are man or women now,the stock is a signal for growing up.,I7A,J"S^*| RqC
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In my opinion,study is always the basis task for students. In school, the teacher should  told the student what is right.The parentes also teacher their chilren do more work in study.If that,the chilren will have a beautiful future.

rosecat1014 发表于 2008-7-24 15:59

[quote]原帖由 [i]kingliuice[/i] 于 2008-7-24 12:11 发表 [url=http://bbs.taisha.org/redirect.php?goto=findpost&pid=12232663&ptid=1094951][img]http://bbs.taisha.org/images/common/back.gif[/img][/url]
The picture vividly depicts the talk between a teacher and his student[color=red],when[/color][color=red] they met in the morning[/color].The student [color=red]asked [/color]his teacher the situation of stock instead of study. [/quote]
1. , when they met in the morning -- 去掉逗号，因为图中描写是正在进行的，所以用正在进行时是不是好一些，而且你的主句用的是一般现在时？when they are meeting in the morning
2. asked -- is asking

[quote]As the drawing shows,nowadays many students don't [color=red]pay attention on[/color] how to improve [color=red]ability[/color] of study,but turned to many other [color=red]places,[/color]such as [color=red]stock,electronic games,and more[/color].This can be attributed to some factors.First of all, with the [color=red]develop[/color] [color=black]of economy[/color],[color=red]more and more money is held in the hand of teenager[/color].They use the money  to buy[color=red] (the)[/color] stock.If they have stock[color=red]s[/color],[color=red]they must be spend time on stock marcket[/color].Secondly,[color=red]the parents's[/color] action influence their children's behavior,so many students focus on [color=red](the)[/color] stock.There are many others factors,for exmaple, children may think [color=red]they are man or women[/color] now,[color=red]the stock is a signal for growing up[/color].[/quote]!Y{!R3K W2E
1. pay attention on -- pay attention to
2. ability -- the ability
3. places -- 其他方面，用aspectsj ~DEgJ
4. stock, electronic games, and more -- the stock trading, the electronic games, and so forth.
5. develop -- development  前者是动词，后者是名词
6. more and more...... -- 这句话改感觉怪怪的。more and more money could be used by teenagers. 或者The teenager has more and more money to use freely.z4d\.~~1u3md
7. they must be spend....-- they must spend time on the stock marcket..YW i(^;?:J
8. the parents's -- the parent's or parents'
9. they are man or women -- 孩子认为他们长大成人they are already adults
10. the stock is ....--股票怎么能成为长大的标志呢？应该是炒股这一行为说明他们长大 so to play stock market is a sign of having grown up.
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[quote]In my opinion,study is always the [color=red]basis[/color] task for students. [color=red]In school[/color], the teacher should [color=red] told[/color] the student what is right.The parentes also [color=red]teacher[/color] their chilren do more work [color=red]in[/color] study.[color=red]If that[/color],the chilren will have [color=red]a beautiful future[/color].[/quote]N,QZbSqP.b
1. basis -- basic
2. in school -- in the schoolZu \s? A9iN
3. told -- tell$SgGNzX
4. teacher -- teach
5. in -- onxg!Ymg!U*M(^D/d
6. if that -- 没有见过这样的用法，根据你的意思，修改为Only by doing so会不会更好些？
7. a beautiful future -- a brighter future `2oD2}\.u1RB
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总评：对图片的描述和论证都不是很充分，没有完全说明你的观点。
      语法错误过多，比如名词前面一般要加冠词，a/an/the，或者形容词修饰，不能什么都不加。如果表示一类要么the+名词单数形式，要么名词复数形式:Fe3x^7tD"ch+~ M1w
      还有很多用法不符合英文习惯，平时应该多积攒一些短语
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作文刚开始可能会有些无话可说的感觉，写多了就好了，要把每个意思表达完整，这样就会多很多字咯。还有要有充分的例子来说明你的论点。加油吧！

ZEROLHC 发表于 2008-7-24 16:03

猫姐改的确实详细....................::51

kingliuice 发表于 2008-7-24 17:06

谢谢修改，真是感激不尽。我会继续努力，争取在考研之前，把作文水平提高上来。

谢谢！

朵朵家园 发表于 2008-7-24 17:17

en ~谢谢猫姐~我一会再重新修改一下我的文章~$ZO[RhCNk%u
我要进步~YEAH~
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亲发表于 2008-7-24 23:40

[quote]原帖由 [i]jlucky88[/i] 于 2008-7-23 23:47 发表 [url=http://bbs.taisha.org/redirect.php?goto=findpost&pid=12228325&ptid=1094951][img]http://bbs.taisha.org/images/common/back.gif[/img][/url]
As is shown in the graph,in a sunny morning,a student come across with his teacher.The teacher said"Hi!",[color=red]but [/color]the student said"Good morning teacher,how much the stock rise?"This phenomen [color=red]could be seen[/color] [color=red]commonly[/color] in the campus life. [/quote]LDC_\6uAU*a
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[quote]As far as I know,there may be three reasons for this.To begin with,with the development of [color=red]the level of our life[/color], [color=red]have [/color]more money per month,[color=red]so[/color] we could [color=red]spend more on[/color] our interest! What's more important,the spare time of [color=red]collage[/color] is too much,[color=red]it cater to the need of stock trading which needs much time.[/color]The last but not the least,the [color=red]collage[/color] student could use their knowledge to judge and decide what to buy,which they think it wonderful![/quote]
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2. have -- having
3. so -- delete this word; in the whole sentence, there is no subject if you use the word "so".7dA7~,i\2^'T7ID
4. spend more on -- spend more for ;  there is no use of " spend...on..."
5. collage -- college
6. you should add "and" before this sentence, or change to "It cater to...."
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[quote]I hold the strong opinion that we shouldn't [color=red]spend too much time on[/color] this! On the one hand,some students waste too much time as to fail the exams they [color=red]attended[/color],which is unaccpetable!On  the  other hand,some others spend the money which was used  as [color=red]the fee[/color].[/quote]gq,D!|1e
1. spend...on...-- spend...for...
2. attended -- took; take the exam
3. the fee -- the tuition
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Your article was based on the point that students should study in the college or university rather than playing the stock market. But you explained mainly why the phenomenon would exist but not why sudents should study. That is you do not approve your view, though there were some words in the last paragraph. At the same time, there are many grammar mistakes in the ariticle, and you should pay attention to that. Also, the same problem with others, you wrote in Chinglish, not English. I suggest that you could read as much as you can, then write following the essay you read.

Bless~

fairytale09 发表于 2008-7-25 21:16

嘿嘿~我也要努力！

This illustration depicts a usual event in our school life---students and teachers sending best regards to each other in the morning. But the content of their communication is completely different from three or five years ago. When the teacher says “Good morning”, what we hear from the student is “Good morning, sir. How’s your stock?”
It can be draw from the picture that how popular the stock-market investment is to Chinese public, no matter who you are, where you from and what you did. Even the primary or middle school students are exposed to this atmosphere. To some extent, it definitely shows the prosperity of Chinese financial market. But as far as I’m concerned, it really has bad influence on the students.
It goes without saying that to erect a concept of investment is important to students, but haste makes waste. Students should concentrate on study and the eligible games and practices which help them to learn it gradually. Too early to be involved in the adults’ world makes them puzzled and even leads them to be money-oriented. |} W7Ss1])q
What’s more, campus is a comparatively pure growing environment for children and teenage. Bull market or bear market as well as many other social phenomena like real estate investment has little things to do with students who are not mature enough to treat the outside world rationally. We should leave them a suitable environment to grow up.

亲发表于 2008-7-26 00:38

[quote]原帖由 [i]fairytale09[/i] 于 2008-7-25 21:16 发表 [url=http://bbs.taisha.org/redirect.php?goto=findpost&pid=12251230&ptid=1094951][img]http://bbs.taisha.org/images/common/back.gif[/img][/url]D4I-]#B0w,e9^y
This illustration depicts [color=red](1)[/color][color=red]a usual[/color] event in our school life---students and teachers [color=red](2)[/color][color=red]sending best regards[/color] to each other in the morning. But the content of their communication is completely different from three or five years ago. When the teacher says “Good morning”, what we hear from the student is “Good morning, [color=red](3)[/color][color=red]sir[/color]. [color=red](4)[/color][color=red]How’s your stock[/color]?” [/quote]
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2. send best regards是送出最美好的祝福，问候就是say hello或者say hi I"C _U6YQ
3. 换成teacher吧lM1eF-h}Q_yZ5r
4. 换一下吧，这个和今天股票涨了多少还是有些出入的

[quote]It can be draw from the picture that how popular the stock-market investment is to Chinese public, no matter who you are, where you from and what you [color=red](1)[/color][color=red]did[/color]. Even [color=red](2)[/color][color=red]the primary or middle school students[/color] are exposed to this atmosphere. To some extent, it definitely shows the prosperity of Chinese financial market. But as far as I’m concerned, it really has bad influence on the students.[/quote]
1. do，和前面的时态保持一致pitQ2Z.hc'Y4{)`
2. 改成students in the primary or the middle school好一些

[quote]It goes without saying that to [color=red](1)[/color][color=red]erect[/color] a concept of investment is important to students, but haste makes waste. Students should concentrate on study and the [color=red](2)[/color][color=red]eligible[/color] games and practices which help them to learn it gradually. Too early to be involved in the adults’ world makes them puzzled and even leads them to be money-oriented. [/quote]BJE*aa6jy#ee
1. 用build好一些#O9ZuE{jM
2. appropriate,suitable0m`*O#bZ$od

[quote]What’s more, [color=red](1)[/color][color=red]campus[/color] is a comparatively pure growing environment for children and [color=red](2)teenage[/color]. Bull market or bear market as well as many other social phenomena like real estate investment has little things to do with students who are not [color=red](3)[/color][color=red]mature enough to treat the outside world rationally[/color]. We should leave them a suitable environment to grow up.[/quote]a"|+Z,ZR/|!|mZ
1. campus指大学校园，不是为children和teenager准备的M"sgK;p:nf
2. teenagers
3. 这个句子没什么语法问题，只是觉得就算成人也不可能完全rational，所以觉得这个理由不太合适。G-ds2a&T5h Rfx E

总评：文字功底还不错，再注意一下语法和个别词的选用。还有逻辑性再强一些，举例再更合适一些。最后文章最好能加个结尾，in sum或者其他什么。

fairytale09 发表于 2008-7-26 18:38

谢谢可爱的猫MM:loveliness:
我有几个小问题还是有点疑惑吖~:loveliness: tt2Yjd?Uk }
students in the primary or the middle school 可不可以写成students in primary or middle school呢？6q6?0uQ:q2h
还有usual是音标[ j ]打头的，是不是还是保持 a usual 呢？
呵呵~~~最近开始背单词，老喜欢用一些刚刚背到的词自己傻秀一下，::z8 猫MM给出的更好的选词::56 真的是很一针见血呢！哈哈！
再次Thanks a lot. R(X'PDN7X
和大家一起，我要进步！::81

亲发表于 2008-7-26 18:57

回复 14# fairytale09 的帖子

我记得是an。。。。
我再找找。。。z _Q9pg4E%[&y[

还有关于冠词，英语里的名次前面基本都要加冠词的，除了特殊情况，所以还是加上的好。。。

jlucky88 发表于 2008-7-26 23:20

回复 11# 亲的帖子

谢谢非常详细的评改和建议! 我会努力更改的哈!::83 ::83 ::z1

fairytale09 发表于 2008-7-27 12:25

回复 15# 亲的帖子

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woshimoshui 发表于 2008-8-23 00:40

As is vividly betaryed in the picture, a teaher says good moring to his student ,while the student takes more attention to stock with the words how many points did the stocks advanced today,simple as it is ,this drawing set us pondering much.What this picture depicts is a common phenomeon in today’s society:most of students neglected the significance of learning under this circumstance that a great number of people are indulged in stock.And the symbolic meaning of this picture is that we should spend more time on openning our mind no other than investment as a student.;l{.R_s^$Zy!C{
Why do we lay emphasis upon this? Seveal points analysed below might equip us .For one thing,what goes around nowdays is that there are no faster approach that invest stock to be a millionare in one night,which will distort the life value of student.For another,the students are denied chances to gain more knowledge ,since they spented time on stock as much as possible.Above of all,they are lack of full capacity to cope with the rick in stock,as result in many tragedies.No better illustration can declare this than the cast mentioned below .In order to keep stock advacing higher,one student invested all of his money,but he bankrupted at the end.
Juding form what has been decrided above,we should realize the harm arisen from the stock.It is high time that we took steps to eliminate this bad effect.Firstly,it is imperative to creative this atmosphere that it is not suitable for students to involve in high risky investment.Secondly,the student should enhance the awarness of the importance of study.$Y4|4U7l&I
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woshimoshui 发表于 2008-8-23 00:46

我是个新手，也刚看到有这么好的帖子，以后努力向大家学习，请猫姐帮我改改，我的英语很差的。先谢上。

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