edison.g的第九次作业issue38 argument1
[size=16pt]38 in the age of television, reading books is not as important as it once was . People can learn as much by watching television as they can by reading books.[/size][size=16pt][/size][size=16pt]在电视时代，阅读已没有原来那样重要了。人们可以通过看电视学到和看书一样多的东西。[/size][size=16pt][/size]
[size=16pt]提纲 我的观点虽然电视已经成为一种重要的学习媒介，但是阅读的重要性仍然大于电视 正 负 负[/size][size=16pt][/size]
[size=16pt]第一段 无可否认电视是一种重要的学习手段，[/size][size=16pt]电视是传播文化、信息的重要工具。电视节目富于教育性和娱乐性，也是知识的源泉[/size][size=16pt]。电视能够为我们提供真实可靠的记录，能够使我们更客观，直接的学到知识比如对于历史事件的学习电视以其以其图像，声音更加具有说服力。电视是我们的学习很方便直接比如新闻，可以通过电视就了解天下大事。电视能够将抽象的东西形象的表达出来。[/size][size=16pt][/size]
[size=16pt]第二段 电视也有很多缺点。首先电视有很多娱乐节目和肥皂剧和无用的广告有时候是一种诱惑，浪费很多时间。[/size][size=16pt]整天看电视，会使孩子感到疲劳。不仅是视力疲劳，大脑也会疲劳。[/size][size=16pt]整天看电视，使孩子时时处于被动地接受的状态，变得被动和缺少想象力。上学的孩子看电视入了迷，就难以体会到读、写、做等有益活动的乐趣，影响孩子的学业。电视上也有不良信息如[/size][size=16pt][/size]
[size=16pt]第三段。阅读仍然是当今最重要的学习方式。看看当今所有的大学中学和小学都扔在使用课本和强调阅读。看看我们当今图书馆中不断增加的藏书都显示了阅读的重要性。阅读能够增加人大脑的想象力和创造力。阅读是一种主动学习的过程，能够使人学到电视上学不到的知识。[/size][size=16pt][/size]
[size=16pt]结尾[/size][size=16pt][/size]
[size=16pt]The speaker asserts that reading books is not as important as it once was because people can learn much by watching television as they can by reading books. According to the issue, different people hold different answers in virtue of respective perspectives. Many people consider that it is appropriate that watching television can take the place of the book as the speaker maintains. However, in my point of view, I remains doubt about the speaker's assertion that the speaker does not take into account the significance of reading book. As discussed below.[/size][size=16pt][/size]
[size=16pt] First of all, it might be desirable to be in favor of the speaker's assertion with considering that television is definitely an important and effective way to study. Television is an indispensable media that convey the culture and information which can benefit us a lot.Television holds three advantages in the process of studying.In the first place, television can provide us with more accurate and convincing document than written records, which can help us objectively study the knowledge and provide us a direct access to universe information.In the second place, it is attractive for children to accept the visual information and vivid images on the television, which provide a crucial spark for the interest of children. On the other hand, the characters and letters in the book often plunge children into boring.Last but not least, television has a myriad of valuable and educational programs that provide a continent way to study. For example, the news and some programs like like "The Science And Technology", The History of Our Nation" would broaden our horizons and mind.There is no doubt that television is an important and effective way to study.[/size][size=16pt][/size]
[size=16pt] On the contrary, every coin have two sides. Beyond the concession that television play an important role in our daily studying, but it is nevertheless impossible for us to ignore the weakness and drawbacks of television.A typical example of this point is the case of the amount of educational programs comparing with that of entertainment programs.Television serves a great deal of recreational programs,while the educational programs have low.As is known to all, recreational programs bear great temptation.If we were addicted to these meaningless recreational programs like soap operas, it would waste a lot of time.In addition, the television make us become a passive receiver rather than a active leaner, which can reduce our imagination and creation. What's more, simultaneously, a larger amount of program which are relevant to sex,violence and crime have a great negative impact on students, which might result in a high proportion of crimes of adolescent who have a week resistance to unhealthy programs.When we consider these aspects, it is hard for us to claim that television is an effective way to study.[/size][size=16pt][/size]
[size=16pt] Finally, I cannot help to say that television cannot replace the book. Reading make us become an active leaner. The true values and significance of reading is in the fact that it request the brain of the reader to think, which can enhance the ability of imagination and creation. Imagination and creation exercises the mind, leaving the person with a better ability to work.Or look at the universities, middle schools and primary schools in all over the world which all lay great emphasis on the importance of reading.Or look at the prodigious amount of books and increasing books in our libraries, witch can show the importance of reading. [/size][size=16pt][/size]
[size=16pt] To sum up, as discussed above, on one hand, we should not ignore the importance of television in the process of studying. However, on the other hand, there is no denying that television cannot replace book because people obtain knowledge mainly from books instead of television.[/size][size=16pt][/size] [align=left][size=12pt]1.The following appeared in a memorandum written by the vice president of Nature's Way, a chain of stores selling health food and other health-related products.[/size][size=10.5pt][/size][/align]
[align=left]
[size=10.5pt][/size][/align]
[align=left][size=12pt]"Previous experience has shown that our stores are most profitable in areas where residents are highly concerned with leading healthy lives. We should therefore build our next new store in Plainsville, which has many such residents. Plainsville merchants report that sales of running shoes and exercise clothing are at all-time highs. The local health club, which nearly closed five years ago due to lack of business, has more members than ever, and the weight training and aerobics classes are always full. We can even anticipate a new generation of customers: Plainsville's schoolchildren are required to participate in a 'fitness for life' program, which emphasizes the benefits of regular exercise at an early age."[/size][size=10.5pt][/size][/align]
[align=left]
[size=10.5pt][/size][/align]
[align=left][size=12pt]以前的经验显示，我们的商店在那些居对健康生活高度关注的地区是盈利最多的。因此我们应该把下一家连锁店开设在[/size][size=12pt]Plainsville[/size][size=12pt]，那里有很多这样的居。[/size][size=12pt]Plainsville[/size][size=12pt]的商家报告说运动鞋和运动衣的销售处于历史高点。当地一家五年前因缺乏客源而濒临倒闭的康体俱乐部现在的会员比以往任何时候都多，减肥训练和体操班总是满员。我们还可以预见到新生代的顾客群：[/size][size=12pt]Plainsville[/size][size=12pt]的在校学生被要求参加一个叫做[/size][size=12pt]"[/size][size=12pt]终生健康[/size][size=12pt]"[/size][size=12pt]的项目，它强调从小开始经常锻炼的好处。[/size][size=10.5pt][/size][/align]
[size=14pt]1. [/size][size=14pt]论断：在[/size][size=14pt]Plainsville[/size][size=14pt]开店会赚钱[/size][size=14pt][/size]
[size=9pt]1. [/size][size=12pt]作者没有提供足够的证据表明[/size][size=12pt]Plainsville[/size][size=12pt]的居民喜爱运动，运动鞋和运动衣的销售好不能说明这个问题，此外，健康俱乐部也一样[/size][size=12pt][/size]
[size=9pt]2. [/size][size=14pt]没有提供关于在此地开店的成本计算问题[/size][size=14pt][/size]
[size=9pt]3. [/size][size=14pt]作者同样没有表明[/size][size=14pt]Plainsville[/size][size=14pt]一定能够成为[/size][size=14pt]Nature's Way[/size][size=14pt]的用户，学校让学生运动，不意味着要学生买[/size][size=14pt]Nature's Way[/size][size=14pt]的产品[/size][size=14pt][/size]
[size=16pt]In this argument, the arguer concludes that we should build our nest new store in Plainsville. To justifiy this conclusion, the arguer point out that previous experience has shown that our stores are most profitable in areas where residents are highly concerned with leading healthy lives. In addition, the arguer cites that the merchants report that sales of running shoes and exercise clothing are all-time highs and the local club has more members than ever. Simultaneously, the arguer cites that schoolchildren are required to paticipate in a fitness for life program. However careful examination and consideration of these evidence reveal that they fail to lend credible support to the recommendation. As far as I am concerned, the argument is logically flawed at least three aspects, as follows. [/size][size=16pt][/size]
[size=16pt] To begin with , the arguer rests on the slim assumption that the residents who buy shoes and exercise clothing are concerned with leading healthy lives but does not provide any evidence to substantiate it. Wether it is in this case hinge on the residents that how much they concern with their healthy lives. It is entirely possible that residents in Piainsivlle like sports very much but does not care their health lives. Or perhaps, there are many athletes in Plainsville. Therefore, without ruling out and considering these possibilities, the arguer cannot confidently draw any conclusion that residents in Plainsville are concerned with their healthy lives.[/size][size=16pt][/size]
[size=16pt] Another problem with this argument is that the arguer simply assumes that schoolchildren who participate in the ' fitness for life' program' will become a new generation of customers. However, there is on compelling evidence to substantiate it . Other possible reasons fail be taken in account by the arguer. It is equally poissble that the plan fail to be implemented by the shool. Or perhaps altough the students participate in the program, there is on detailed information to show how many students will be concerned with their healthy lives and whether the students will buy the healthy food and healthy-related products from Nature'way stores. Since the arguer fail to provide adequate information about these possibilities, the arguer cannot lend any firm claim that we can anticipate a new generation of customers due the fitness for life program of schoolchildren.[/size][size=16pt][/size]
[size=16pt] Finally, altough the above assumptions are substantiated. The arguer fails to consider the competitive envirionmemt and the cost of building a new chain store in Plainsville. It is entirely possible that there are several similar stores which sell healthy food and heath-related products in Plainsville. Or perhaps the cost of building a new store like the rent price is considerably large, which is higher than the profit. If the arguer cannot consider and eliminate these possibilities, the arguer cannot make a conclusion we should build a new store in Plainsville.[/size][size=16pt][/size]
[size=16pt] In conclusion, the arguer's argument is unpersuasive. In order to maker it more acceptable, the arguer should provide more detail information to show that the residents in Plainvelle are concerned with their healthy lives. In addition, i would need more adequate evidence to substantiate that the schoolchildrens who are required to participate in the program will become the customers of the store. Last but not least, to better evaluate the argument, the arguer should provide more market information about the Plainvelle.[/size][size=16pt][/size]
小津批改issue38
[size=2][size=5]38 in the age of television, reading books is not as important as it once was . People can learn as much by watching television as they can by reading books.[/size][size=16pt][/size][/size]
[size=2]The speaker asserts that reading books is not as important as it once was because people can learn much by watching television as they can by reading books.([color=red]觉把主题句定位因果关系似乎也有道理，但是觉得出题者的意图好像不是这样的，这两个也可以不是因果关系吧？）[/color] According to the issue, different people hold different answers in virtue of respective perspectives. Many people consider that it is appropriate that watching television can take the place of the book as the speaker maintains. However, in my point of view, I remain[color=red]（[/color]s[color=red]）[/color] doubt about the speaker's assertion that the speaker does not take into account the significance of reading book. As discussed below[color=red]（,as discussed below[/color]).[/size]
[size=2][size=16pt][/size]
[size=16pt]First of all, it might be desirable to be in favor of the speaker's assertion with considering that television is definitely an important and effective way to study. Television（[color=red]换成It[/color]） is an indispensable media that [color=red]convey the culture and information（这个搭配我自己也不确定）[/color] which can benefit us a lot.Television holds three advantages in the process of studying.In the first place, television can provide us with [color=blue]more accurate and convincing document than written records, which can help us objectively study the knowledge and provide us a direct access to universe information（[/color][color=red]这里感觉表达的意思就和你的提纲里的意思.你是想说电视提供更可靠的记录吧？）[/color]In the second place, it is attractive for children to accept the visual information and vivid images on the television, which provide a crucial spark for the interest of children.（[color=red]这个很好哦[/color]）[color=black] On the other hand[/color],（[color=magenta]这里感觉插入on the other hand 就有些混乱了）[/color] the characters and letters in the book often plunge children into boring.Last but not least, television has a myriad of valuable and educational programs that provide a continent way to study. For example, the news and some programs like like （[color=sandybrown]去掉一个Like[/color])"The Science And Technology", The History of Our Nation" would broaden our horizons and mind.There is no doubt that television is an important and effective way to study.[/size]
[size=16pt][/size]
[size=16pt] On the contrary, every coin have two sides. Beyond the concession that television play an important role in our daily studying, but it is nevertheless impossible for us to ignore the weakness and drawbacks([color=red]weakness 和drawbacks意思表示的是一样的，可以去掉一个[/color]） of television.A typical example of this point is the case of the amount of educational programs comparing with that of entertainment programs.Television serves a great deal of recreational programs,while the educational programs have low（[color=red]？[/color]）.As is known to all, recreational programs bear great temptation.If we were addicted to these meaningless recreational programs like soap operas, it would waste a lot of time.In addition, the television make us become a passive receiver rather than a active leaner, which can reduce our imagination and creation. What's more, simultaneously, a larger amount of program which are relevant to sex,violence and crime have a great negative impact on students, which might result in a high proportion of crimes of adolescent who have a week resistance to unhealthy programs.When we consider these aspects, it is hard for us to claim that television is an effective way to study.[/size][size=16pt][/size]
[size=16pt]Finally, I cannot help to say that television cannot replace the book. Reading make us become（[color=red]become 去掉比较好[/color]） an active leaner. The true values and significance of reading is in the fact that it request the brain of the reader to think, which can enhance the ability of imagination and creation.[color=red]这句写的好[/color]） Imagination and creation exercises the mind, leaving the person with a better ability to work.Or look at the universities, middle schools and primary schools in（[color=red]in去掉[/color]） all over the world which all lay great emphasis on the importance of reading.Or look at the prodigious amount of books and increasing books in our libraries, witch can show the importance of reading. [/size]
[size=16pt][/size]
[size=16pt]To sum up, as discussed above, on one hand, we should not ignore the importance of television in the process of studying. However, on the other hand, there is no denying that television cannot replace book because people obtain knowledge mainly from books instead of television.结尾简练，很好哦。我的外交给我讲的观点就是结尾简练[/size][/size]
argument1 批改 By小津
[size=2]In this argument, the arguer concludes that we should build our nest new store in Plainsville. To justifiy this conclusion, the arguer point out that previous experience has shown that our stores are most profitable in areas where residents are highly concerned with leading healthy lives. In addition, the arguer cites that the merchants report that sales of running shoes and exercise clothing are all-time highs and the local club has more members than ever. Simultaneously, the arguer cites that schoolchildren are required to paticipate in a fitness for life program. However careful examination and consideration of these evidence（[color=red]s[/color]) reveal that they fail to lend credible support to the recommendation. As far as I am concerned, the argument is logically flawed at least three aspects, as follows. [/size][size=2][size=16pt][/size]
[size=16pt]To begin with , the arguer rests on the slim assumption that the residents who buy shoes and exercise clothing are concerned with leading healthy lives but does not provide any evidence to substantiate it. Wether it is in this case hinge on the residents that how much they concern with their healthy lives. It is entirely possible that residents in Piainsivlle like sports very much but does not care their health lives.([color=red]这点我没有想到[/color]） Or perhaps, there are many athletes in Plainsville. Therefore, without ruling out and considering these possibilities, the arguer cannot confidently draw any conclusion that residents in Plainsville are concerned with their healthy lives.[/size]
[size=16pt][/size]
[size=16pt] Another problem with this argument is that the arguer simply assumes that schoolchildren who participate in the ' fitness for life' program' will become a new generation of customers. However, there is on compelling evidence to substantiate it . Other possible reasons[color=red]（？reasons?是指factors 吗？）[/color] fail be taken in account by the arguer. It is equally poissble that the plan fail to be implemented by the shool. Or perhaps altough the students participate in the program, there is on（[color=red]no)[/color] detailed information to show how many students will be concerned with their healthy lives and whether the students will buy the healthy food and healthy-related products from Nature'way stores. Since the arguer fail to provide adequate information about these possibilities, the arguer cannot lend any firm claim that we can anticipate a new generation of customers due the fitness for life program of schoolchildren.[/size]
[size=16pt][/size]
[size=16pt] Finally, altough the above assumptions are substantiated. The arguer fails to consider the competitive envirionmemt and the cost of building a new chain store in Plainsville. It is entirely possible that there are several similar stores which sell healthy food and heath-related products in Plainsville. Or perhaps the cost of building a new store like the rent price is considerably large, which is higher than the profit. If the arguer cannot consider and eliminate these possibilities, the arguer cannot make a conclusion we should build a new store in Plainsville.[/size]
[size=16pt][/size]
[size=16pt] In conclusion, the arguer's argument is unpersuasive. In order to maker it more acceptable, the arguer should provide more detail([color=red]ed )[/color] information to show that the residents in Plainvelle are concerned with their healthy lives. In addition, i would need more adequate evidence to substantiate that the schoolchildrens who are required to participate in the program will become the customers of the store. Last but not least, to better evaluate the argument, the arguer should provide more market information about the Plainvelle.[/size]
写的很好，让步，层层递进great work[/size] 恩，我觉得issue38写成比较比较好，你给出的论证过程也偏向于比较
足球日日发，中国足球，足球网址，热点新闻，国际足坛，实况足球-www.zq118.com
[url=http://www.zq118.com][size=4][color=blue]足球,即时比分,足球比分,篮球比分,足球新闻,足球推荐,足球赔率,足球网址,足球彩票,实况足球,足球改单,即时赔率,五大联赛,各国联赛,球队资料,球员资料,篮球分析,足球分析,赛前分析,热点新闻,球队资料,国际足坛,中国足球,排球比分,橄榄球比分,乒乓球比分,羽毛球比分,棒球比分,NBA直播,走地赔率,修改注单,足球论坛,国际足坛,热点新闻,NBA直播,英超,国足,意甲,西甲,德甲,中超,亚冠,欧冠杯,世界杯 中国足球,[/color][/size][/url][url=http://www.zq118.com][size=4][color=blue]皇冠,皇冠网,**六仔,皇冠网上投注博彩公司,皇冠后台,皇冠网足球投注服务中心,皇冠足球投注开户,皇冠篮球投注开户,皇冠网球投注开户,皇冠诚聘地区代理,皇冠博彩网,皇冠线上投注,皇冠投注,皇冠国际博彩投注网 皇冠正网,皇冠亚洲博彩投注网,足球博彩投注,信用博彩投注,信用投注,信誉最佳,提彩迅速, 系统出租,皇冠在线投注 金沙开户投注 皇冠各类平台出租皇冠正网,welcomc888crown,皇冠投注网,?g迎光?R皇冠投注网有限公司,welcomc888crown,皇冠投注 皇冠投注网,皇冠ka88888投注网,皇投注网,皇冠足球投注网,皇冠投注网开户,皇冠最新投注网 皇冠ry11111投注网,皇冠ry22222投注网,welcomc888crown,皇冠备用投注网,皇冠ccrr11投注网 皇冠投注网开户,皇冠ccrr22投注网,皇冠足球投注后备网,皇冠足球投注开户,皇冠足球投注网址 皇冠足球投注网,皇冠足球投注平台,投注足球,皇冠网,皇冠投注开户,亚洲最大外围投注交易中心[/color][/size][/url]
[url=http://www.zq118.com][size=4][color=blue]足球改单,新宝2(皇冠)改单,**六仔,将输改赢,不用密码,黑森林,足球改单,黑客改单,足球黑客改单,破.解网,修改注单,改单,专业足球改单,足球改单,注单修改,修改注单,黑客改单,**改单,六仔注单修改,软件改单,欧亚科技修改注单,专业足球改单免密码,**改单,六仔注单修改,滚球偷鸡,投注改单,[/color][/size][/url]
页:
[1]