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达朗贝尔 发表于 2009-11-6 00:50

小津开始限时间模考啦

TOPIC: ISSUE153 - "Students should bring a certain skepticism to whatever they study. They should question what they are taught instead of accepting it passively."
WORDS: 415       TIME: 00:50:00       DATE: 2009-11-5 19:09:55
Students should bring a certain skepticism to whatever they study. They should question what they are taught instesd of accepting it passively.Then they become available to gain knowledge as profoundly as possible. I fundamentally agree with the assertion for that skepticism has always been a significant role in contributing to the development in the history and modern society.Nevertheless, the speaker overemphasis the role of  skepticism for people.To some extent, there may be misleading effect based on that overemphasis.

On the one hand, skepticism has always been playing a significant role in contributing to the development of society either in history or in modern life.

Admiteddly,most of the innovations, inventions,and new idesa are derived from the skepticism especially in the realm of science.An illustration of this is that the proposal of the heliocentre theory by Copernicus, a very great astronomer in the Renaissance,which is a enormous innovation in Medieval age.At that time, people including the authoritative scholars and researchers, were hold the view that the Earth was the centre of the universe. He was skeptical about that after his own research and caculation about the locus and the period of the earth.

Secondly, a certain skepticism is vey important for students in their study. The students will learn the inner resouce of the ideas ,master the profound meaning of the theory,and learn reasoning and cognitive thinking by skepticism. For example, a student, who is interested in history about the Industy Revolution,will gain nothing if he simply accept the contention that it is  a great innovation.Wthout skepticism to his study, he would never understand the original reasons and the rule of the development of societies.

Nonetheless, not everything ought to be skeptical. Over-skepticism might mislead people and reduce the efficiency of working and study. Students are such a special group, who need guiding and supervising from teachers, friends and parents during their studies. A student who is always doubt everything taught by others will meet plenty of obscles in his study for that he has no compass.And he would have no true firends in respect of lack communicating with others.The  egotism will mislead him.

In summary, we can affirmatively claim that the speaker makes an reasonable conclusion in pointing out that skepticism shoud be brought to students' study and it is needful to question what students are taught. However, the speaker fails to take into account many other impacts brought by skepticism.On that occation, it is imprudent to recommend skepticism to all students in their wholly study.

TOPIC: ARGUMENT45 - The following appeared as an editorial in a wildlife journal.
"Arctic deer live on islands in Canada's arctic region. They search for food by moving over ice from island to island during the course of a year. Their habitat is limited to areas warm enough to sustain the plants on which they feed, and cold enough, at least some of the year, for the ice to cover the sea separating the islands, allowing the deer to travel over it. Unfortunately, according to reports from local hunters, the deer populations are declining. Since these reports coincide with recent global warming trends that have caused the sea ice to melt, we can conclude that the decline in arctic deer populations is the result of deer being unable to follow their age-old migration patterns across the frozen sea."
WORDS: 431       TIME: 00:45:00       DATE: 2009-11-5 23:58:40
In this argument, the author concludes that the decline in arctic deer populations is the result of deer being unable to follow their age-old migration patterns across the frozen sea.  To justify it, the author cites reports from local hunters which showed that the deer populations are declining, and it points out that recent global warming trends that have caused the sea ice to melt are accorded with the reports. However, this argument has weaknesses in at least three aspects, as followed.

First  of all, the argument fails to dedicate sufficient evidence to indicate that reports from hunters are objective or reliable. If the subjectives of the reports were random chosen and represented all the population of the region, the reports would be reasonable.Otherwise,it would be groudless. Moreover, it is entirely possible that many hunters fails to tell the truth.Or perhaps most of the deer haven't been seen or noticed by them,then the number of the population has not declined in fact. Without considering those possibilities, the reports are never cogent.

Secondly, the fact that recent global warming trends have caused the sea ice to melt fails to prove that the ice in Canada's arctic region which arctic deer live on would melt. Perhaps the sea ice of the region has not melt. On the contrary, it stay the same or even freezed more.Then the deer would have no obstacles in migration.

Thirdly,even if the sea ice in deer's living places has melted, this argument still fails to indicate that deer would go to die for the changes in climate.Maybe they change their own habits and characters along with the climate to adapt to new environment.

Finally,even if the foregoing assumptions are all accepted, the conclusion is unwarranted for the author fails to take into account of many other factors which would have effect on the population of the deer. Perhaps the decrease is mostly due to the lack of food, because the habitat was not warm enogh to sustain the plants which they feed on. Or perhaps the hunting of this region hadn't been limited before so that the population of deer declined.

In summary, this argument is unconvincing and unpersuasive as it stands. To support it, the author needs to provide adequate details about the reports from the hunters to assure that the results are credible. In addition, it is necessary to indicate the casual relationship between global warming and the decrease of the deer.In the final analysis,  many other ingredients besides the migration patterns across with the frozen sea,such as the lack of food, or the over-hunting by hunters.

时间上忠诚问题，有ideas 来不及表达

达朗贝尔 发表于 2009-11-6 01:39

先自己改一下哈，在求拍

TOPIC: ISSUE153 - "Students should bring a certain skepticism to whatever they study. They should question what they are taught instead of accepting it passively."
WORDS: 415       TIME: 00:50:00       DATE: 2009-11-5 19:09:55
Students should bring a certain skepticism to whatever they study. They should question what they are taught instesd of accepting it passively.Then they become available to gain knowledge as profoundly as possible. I fundamentally agree with the assertion[color=teal]  [/color].Nevertheless, the speaker overemphasis the role of  skepticism for people.To some extent, there may be misleading effect based on that overemphasis.

On the one hand, skepticism has always been playing a significant role in [color=blue]study[/color] contributing to the development of society either in history or in modern life.

Admiteddly,most of the innovations, inventions,and new idesa are derived from the skepticism especially in the realm of science.An illustration of this is that the proposal of the heliocentre theory by Copernicus, a very great astronomer in the Renaissance,which is a enormous innovation in Medieval age.At that time, people including the authoritative scholars and researchers, were hold the view that the Earth was the centre of the universe. He was skeptical about that after his own research and caculation about the locus and the period of the earth.[color=blue]Aother illustration of thia is the proposal of nuclear atom theory by Rutherford, the laureate of Nobel Peace Prize in physics. He are skepticial against the view of the cke and nuts model of atom by Thomson, which was the authory of that area.
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Secondly, a certain skepticism is vey important for students in their study. The students will learn the inner resouce of the ideas ,master the profound meaning of the theory,and learn reasoning and cognitive thinking by skepticism. For example, a student, who is interested in history about the Industy Revolution,will gain nothing if he simply accept the contention that it is  a great innovation.Wthout skepticism to his study, he would never understand the original reasons and the rule of the development of societies.

Nonetheless,[color=blue] on the other hand,[/color] not everything ought to be skeptical. Over-skepticism might mislead people and reduce the efficiency of working and study. Students are such a special group, who need guiding and supervising from teachers, friends and parents during their studies. A student who is always doubt [color=blue]of [/color]everything taught by others will [color=blue]encounte[/color]r plenty of obscles in his study for that he has no compass.And he would have no true firends in respect of lack communicating with others.The  egotism will mislead him.

In summary, we can affirmatively claim that the speaker makes an reasonable conclusion in pointing out that skepticism shoud be brought to students' study and it is needful to question what students are taught. However, the speaker fails to take into account many other impacts brought by skepticism.On that occation, it is imprudent to recommend skepticism to all students in their wholly study. [color=blue]We cannot doubt about whatever we study, and it needs rational mind to evaluate the extent.

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TOPIC: ARGUMENT45 - The following appeared as an editorial in a wildlife journal.
"Arctic deer live on islands in Canada's arctic region. They search for food by moving over ice from island to island during the course of a year. Their habitat is limited to areas warm enough to sustain the plants on which they feed, and cold enough, at least some of the year, for the ice to cover the sea separating the islands, allowing the deer to travel over it. Unfortunately, according to reports from local hunters, the deer populations are declining. Since these reports coincide with recent global warming trends that have caused the sea ice to melt, we can conclude that the decline in arctic deer populations is the result of deer being unable to follow their age-old migration patterns across the frozen sea."
WORDS: 431       TIME: 00:45:00       DATE: 2009-11-5 23:58:40
In this argument, the author concludes that the decline in arctic deer populations is the result of deer being unable to follow their age-old migration patterns across the frozen sea.  To justify it, the author cites reports from local hunters which showed that the deer populations are declining, and it points out that recent global warming trends that have caused the sea ice to melt are accorded with the reports. However, this argument has weaknesses in at least three aspects, as followed.

First  of all, the argument fails to dedicate sufficient evidence to indicate that reports from hunters are objective or reliable. If the subjectives of the reports were random chosen and represented all the population of the region, the reports would be reasonable.Otherwise,it would be groudless. Moreover, it is entirely possible that many hunters fails to tell the truth.Or perhaps most of the deer haven't been seen or noticed by them,then the number of the population has not declined in fact. Without considering those possibilities, the reports are never cogent.

Secondly, the fact that recent global warming trends have caused the sea ice to melt fails to prove that the ice in Canada's arctic region which arctic deer live on would melt. Perhaps the sea ice of the region has not melt. On the contrary, it stay the same or even freezed more.Then the deer would have no obstacles in migration.

Thirdly,even if the sea ice in deer's living places has melted, this argument still fails to indicate that deer would go to die for the changes in climate.Maybe they change their own habits and characters along with the climate to adapt to new environment.[color=blue] Then it is irrationall to suggest that the decrease of the deer has a casual relationship witrh the global warming.
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Finally,even if the foregoing assumptions are all accepted, the conclusion is unwarranted for the author fails to take into account of many other factors which would have effect on the population of the deer. Perhaps the decrease is mostly due to the lack of food, because the habitat was not warm enogh to sustain the plants which they feed on. Or perhaps the hunting of this region hadn't been limited before so that the population of deer declined[color=blue]. With overlooking those possibilities, the conclusion is unfounded.

[/color]In summary, this argument is unconvincing and unpersuasive as it stands. To support it, the author needs to provide adequate details about the reports from the hunters to assure that the results are credible. In addition, it is necessary to indicate the casual relationship between global warming and the decrease of the deer.In the final analysis,  many other ingredients besides the migration patterns across with the frozen sea,such as the lack of food, or the over-hunting by hunters.

达朗贝尔 发表于 2009-11-6 01:44

忘了把提纲发上去了可以作为批改的参考哈

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[b][font=幼圆][size=12pt][font=Times New Roman]Key words: skepticism, whatever, question,[/font][/size][/font][/b]
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[b][font=幼圆][size=12pt]第一段：[/size][/font][/b][b][font=幼圆][size=12pt][/size][/font][/b]
[b][font=幼圆][size=12pt]第二段：[/size][/font][/b][b][font=幼圆][size=12pt][font=Times New Roman]On the one hand,[/font][/size][/font][/b][b][font=幼圆][size=12pt]。。。。[/size][/font][/b][b][font=幼圆][size=12pt][/size][/font][/b]
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a cake with many nuts,[/font][/size][/font][/b][b][font=幼圆][size=12pt]提出了[/size][/font][/b][b][font=幼圆][size=12pt][font=Times New Roman]nuclear atom theory[/font][/size][/font][/b]
[b][font=幼圆][size=12pt]第四段：怀疑论对于现在学生是非常重要的。只有通过质疑才能更深刻的了解事物发展的本质，例如：对于学习化学而言，仅仅了解现象还不够，需要质疑为什么，，对于学习历史对于历史人物的分析需要有自己的见解，不能只是依靠他人的[/size][/font][/b][b][font=幼圆][size=12pt][font=Times New Roman]analysis[/font][/size][/font][/b]
[b][font=幼圆][size=12pt]第五段，[/size][/font][/b][b][font=幼圆][size=12pt][font=Times New Roman]however[/font][/size][/font][/b][b][font=幼圆][size=12pt]，不能对所有的东西质疑，过度的质疑会降低学习的效率，因为很多的原理和事实[/size][/font][/b][b][font=幼圆][size=12pt][font=Times New Roman]fact[/font][/size][/font][/b][b][font=幼圆][size=12pt]已经是被公认的了，没有质疑的必要了，如：对与朋友老师的劝导的意见，不要总是怀疑，总是怀疑的人在[color=#339966]学[/color][color=blue]术上会有阻[/color][color=#339966]碍[/color]，[color=blue]人际交往也会带来困难[/color][/size][/font][/b][b][font=幼圆][size=12pt][/size][/font][/b]
[b][font=幼圆][size=12pt]第六段：[/size][/font][/b][b][font=幼圆][size=12pt][font=Times New Roman]In summary[/font][/size][/font][/b][b][font=幼圆][size=12pt]，。。。。[/size][/font][/b][b][font=幼圆][size=12pt][font=Times New Roman]A[/font][/size][/font][/b]

coxmyself 发表于 2009-11-7 00:59

[font=幼圆][size=5]153[/size][/font][font=幼圆][size=12pt][font=Times New Roman]Students should bring a certain skepticism to whatever they study. They should question what they are taught instead of accepting it passively.[/font][/size][/font]
[font=幼圆][size=12pt][font=Times New Roman]Key words: skepticism, whatever, question,[/font][/size][/font]
[font=幼圆][size=12pt][font=Times New Roman]Syllabus: fundamentally agree with the assertion, [/font][/size][/font][font=幼圆][size=12pt]但是忽视了[/size][/font][font=幼圆][size=12pt][font=Times New Roman]absolute skepticism [/font][/size][/font][font=幼圆][size=12pt]也会带来不好的影响[/size][/font][font=幼圆][size=12pt][/size][/font]
[font=幼圆][size=12pt]第一段：[/size][/font][font=幼圆][size=12pt][/size][/font]
[font=幼圆][size=12pt]第二段：[/size][/font][font=幼圆][size=12pt][font=Times New Roman]On the one hand,[/font][/size][/font][font=幼圆][size=12pt]。。。。[/size][/font][font=幼圆][size=12pt][/size][/font]
[font=幼圆][size=12pt]第三段：[/size][/font][font=幼圆][size=12pt][font=Times New Roman] Admittedly[/font][/size][/font][font=幼圆][size=12pt]，绝大多数的创新都是从[/size][/font][font=幼圆][size=12pt][font=Times New Roman]doubt [/font][/size][/font][font=幼圆][size=12pt]开始的，例如：科学方面，[/size][/font][font=幼圆][size=12pt][font=Times New Roman]astronomy [/font][/size][/font][font=幼圆][size=12pt]，[/size][/font][font=幼圆][size=12pt][font=Times New Roman]Copernicus found the heliocentric ordering of the planets., Galileo ,[/font][/size][/font][font=幼圆][size=12pt]对于前人的地心学说持怀疑，而[/size][/font][font=幼圆][size=12pt][font=Times New Roman]Rutherford [/font][/size][/font][font=幼圆][size=12pt]因怀疑[/size][/font][font=幼圆][size=12pt][font=Times New Roman]Thomson [/font][/size][/font][font=幼圆][size=12pt]的[/size][/font][font=幼圆][size=12pt][font=Times New Roman]atomic structure
as
a cake with many nuts,[/font][/size][/font][font=幼圆][size=12pt]提出了[/size][/font][font=幼圆][size=12pt][font=Times New Roman]nuclear atom theory[/font][/size][/font]
[font=幼圆][size=12pt]第四段：怀疑论对于现在学生是非常重要的。只有通过质疑才能更深刻的了解事物发展的本质，例如：对于学习化学而言，仅仅了解现象还不够，需要质疑为什么，，对于学习历史对于历史人物的分析需要有自己的见解，不能只是依靠他人的[/size][/font][font=幼圆][size=12pt][font=Times New Roman]analysis[/font][/size][/font]
[font=幼圆][size=12pt]第五段，[/size][/font][font=幼圆][size=12pt][font=Times New Roman]however[/font][/size][/font][font=幼圆][size=12pt]，不能对所有的东西质疑，过度的质疑会降低学习的效率，因为很多的原理和事实[/size][/font][font=幼圆][size=12pt][font=Times New Roman]fact[/font][/size][/font][font=幼圆][size=12pt]已经是被公认的了，没有质疑的必要了，如：对与朋友老师的劝导的意见，不要总是怀疑，总是怀疑的人在[color=#339966]学[/color][color=blue]术上会有阻[/color][color=#339966]碍[/color]，[color=blue]人际交往也会带来困难[/color][/size][/font][font=幼圆][size=12pt][/size][/font]
[font=幼圆][size=12pt]第六段：[/size][/font][font=幼圆][size=12pt][font=Times New Roman]In summary[/font][/size][/font][font=幼圆][size=12pt]，。。。。[/size][/font][font=幼圆][size=12pt][font=Times New Roman]A[/font][/size][/font]
TOPIC: ISSUE153 - "Students should bring a certain skepticism to whatever they study. They should question what they are taught instead of accepting it passively."
WORDS: 415       TIME: 00:50:00       DATE: 2009-11-5 19:09:55
Students should bring a certain skepticism to whatever they study. They should question what they are taught instesd of accepting it passively.Then they become available to gain knowledge as profoundly as possible. I fundamentally agree with the assertion[color=teal]  [/color].Nevertheless, the speaker overemphasis[color=red](这是名词吧用overrate或是overemphasize)[/color] the role of  skepticism for people.To some extent, there may be misleading effect based on that overemphasis.[color=red]这样的开头你平时很少用啊，我也不知道这样写好不好

[/color]On the one hand, skepticism has always been playing a significant role in [color=blue]study[/color] contributing to the development of society either in history or in modern life.
[color=red]你的结构很新颖。 either or 的意思是：不是...就是..., ...或...用在这里合理吗。感觉这里的study是名词吗这是一句主题句是说在历史和现代生活中对社会的发展贡献很大。感觉很别扭。而且感觉饿这个主题句没有很好概括下面的内容。[/color]
Admiteddly,most of the innovations, inventions,and new idesa are derived from the skepticism especially in the realm of science.An illustration of this is that the proposal of the heliocentre theory by Copernicus, a very great astronomer in the Renaissance,which is a enormous innovation in Medieval age[color=red].[/color]At that time, people including the authoritative scholars and researchers, were hold[color=red]（这里的were hold 不对吧应该直接用hold 就行吧[/color]） the view that the Earth was the centre of the universe. He was skeptical about that after his own research and caculation about the locus and the period of the earth.[color=blue]Aother illustration of thia is the proposal of nuclear atom theory by Rutherford, the laureate of Nobel Peace Prize in physics. He are skepticial against the view of the cke and nuts model of atom by Thomson, which was the authory of that area.
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Secondly, a certain skepticism is vey important for students in their study. The students will learn the inner resouce of the ideas ,master the profound meaning of the theory,and learn reasoning and cognitive thinking by skepticism. For example, a student, who is interested in history about the Industy Revolution,will gain nothing if he simply accept the contention that it is  a great innovation.Wthout skepticism to his study, he would never understand the original reasons and the rule of the development of societies. [color=red]感觉这个例子叙述的不是很详细比如可以再详细一些如些如果不是质疑就不知道工业**的好处和弊端，不知道它的起源和发展和贡献。

[/color]Nonetheless,[color=blue] on the other hand,[/color] not everything ought to be skeptical. Over-skepticism might mislead people and reduce the efficiency of working and study. Students are such a special group, who need guiding and supervising from teachers, friends and parents during their studies. A student who is always doubt [color=blue]of [/color]everything taught by others will [color=blue]encounte[/color]r plenty of obscles（[color=red]obstacles)[/color] in his study for that he has no compass.And he would have no true firends in respect of lack communicating with others.([color=red]in respect of 是关于的意思吧这里合适吗[/color]）The  egotism will mislead him.

In summary, we can affirmatively claim that the speaker makes an reasonable conclusion in pointing out that skepticism shoud be brought to students' study and it is needful [color=red]（needful 好吗用necessary 比较好吧[/color]）to question what students are taught. However, the speaker fails to take into account many other impacts brought by skepticism.On that occation, it is imprudent to recommend skepticism to all students in their wholly study. [color=blue]We cannot doubt about whatever we study, and it needs rational mind to evaluate the extent.[/color]
[color=blue][color=red]感觉还是丰富一些多家一些道理的论述和例子。这样已经能把整个事情说明白了。我在想我一直在修改一些用法和单词的拼写的错误但是很少涉及句子的结构和习惯。有时后我在想我们写的句子的服不符合老外的写作习惯和用法。比如你的第一段的描写skepticism has always been playing a significant role in study contributing to the development of society either in history or in modern life.我感觉如果把这句翻译成中文很别扭，我有时很不确定这样的描述服不符合老外的习惯。

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coxmyself 发表于 2009-11-7 01:14

TOPIC: ARGUMENT45 - The following appeared as an editorial in a wildlife journal.
"Arctic deer live on islands in Canada's arctic region. They search for food by moving over ice from island to island during the course of a year. Their habitat is limited to areas warm enough to sustain the plants on which they feed, and cold enough, at least some of the year, for the ice to cover the sea separating the islands, allowing the deer to travel over it. Unfortunately, according to reports from local hunters, the deer populations are declining. Since these reports coincide with recent global warming trends that have caused the sea ice to melt, we can conclude that the decline in arctic deer populations is the result of deer being unable to follow their age-old migration patterns across the frozen sea."
WORDS: 431       TIME: 00:45:00       DATE: 2009-11-5 23:58:40
In this argument, the author concludes that the decline in arctic deer populations is the result of deer being unable to follow their age-old migration patterns across the frozen sea.  To justify it, the author cites reports from local hunters which showed that the deer populations are declining, and it points out that recent global warming trends that have caused the sea ice to melt are accorded with the reports. However, this argument has weaknesses in at least three aspects, as followed.

First  of all, the argument fails to dedicate sufficient evidence to indicate that reports from hunters are objective or reliable. If the subjectives of the reports were random chosen and represented all the population of the region, the reports would be reasonable.Otherwise,it would be groudless. Moreover, it is entirely possible that many hunters fails to tell the truth.Or perhaps most of the deer haven't been seen or noticed by them,then the number of the population has not declined in fact. Without considering those possibilities, the reports are never cogent.

Secondly, the fact that recent global warming trends have caused the sea ice to melt fails to prove that the ice in Canada's arctic region which arctic deer live on would melt. Perhaps the sea ice of the region has not melt. On the contrary, it stay the same or even freezed more.Then the deer would have no obstacles in migration.

Thirdly,even if the sea ice in deer's living places has melted, this argument still fails to indicate that deer would go to die for the changes in climate.Maybe they change their own habits and characters along with the climate to adapt to new environment.[color=blue] Then it is irrationall to suggest that the decrease of the deer has a casual relationship witrh the global warming.[/color]
Finally,even if the foregoing assumptions are all accepted, the conclusion is unwarranted for the author fails to take into account of many other factors which would have effect on the population of the deer. Perhaps the decrease is mostly due to the lack of food, because the habitat was not warm enogh to sustain the plants which they feed on. Or perhaps the hunting of this region hadn't been limited before so that the population of deer declined[color=blue]. With overlooking those possibilities, the conclusion is unfounded.

[/color]In summary, this argument is unconvincing and unpersuasive as it stands. To support it, the author needs to provide adequate details about the reports from the hunters to assure that the results are credible. In addition, it is necessary to indicate the casual relationship between global warming and the decrease of the deer.In the final analysis,  many other ingredients besides the migration patterns across with the frozen sea,such as the lack of food, or the over-hunting by hunters.
[color=red]你找的这些错误很好，如果能在30分钟内找到这些错误并且写完就很好了。你还找了四个错误。我现在看也就找了两个错误写到这个数已经够了[/color]。

达朗贝尔 发表于 2009-11-7 01:38

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意见很中肯，3Q

达朗贝尔 发表于 2009-11-7 11:41

第二次模考

[font=Batang][size=10.5pt][font=Times New Roman]TOPIC: ISSUE136 - "The absence of choice is a circumstance that is very, very rare."[/font][/size][/font]
[font=Batang][size=10.5pt][font=Times New Roman]WORDS: [/font][/size][/font][font=Batang][size=10.5pt]４13[color=blue](改后523[/color]）[/size][/font][font=Batang][size=10.5pt][font=Times New Roman]
TIME: 00:45:00
DATE: 2009-11-7 10:46:48[/font][/size][/font]
[font=Batang][size=10.5pt][font=Times New Roman][/font][/size][/font]
[font=Batang][size=10.5pt][font=Times New Roman]Is the absence of choice is a rare circumstance? I fundamentally agree with the speaker for that we have free will and plenty of means to combat with troubles and difficuties in life in a democratic society. Nevertheless, the assertion overlooks the limitation for individuals to obey the rules.And examples from s[/font][/size][/font][color=blue][font=Batang][size=10.5pt][color=blue]ｃ[/color][/size][/font][/color][font=Batang][size=10.5pt][font=Times New Roman]ientific research and laws would aptly help clarify that.[/font][/size][/font]
[font=Batang][size=10.5pt][font=Times New Roman][/font][/size][/font]
[font=Batang][size=10.5pt][font=Times New Roman]Adimttedly,people are free of choices in daily life when facing a proplem.Many people often claim that they have no choices to overcome the obstacles. That is not the truth.[color=blue] Practically[/color], those people haven't found other means to resolve to problems ,or they
consider other choices unsuitable for them.An convincing illustation of this point is
Oliva Ong, a prominent singer, born in Singapore but appreciated by her fans who are addicted to jazz all over the world. At her first[color=blue] year in her singing [/color]career, she sang popular music
by didn't get known by many people.Then she met Bassa Nova, she found she was good at singing jazz and more importantly, her sweet and unique voice was [color=blue]absolutely[/color] different from others. Therefore,she made a choice to change which is compeling her [color=blue]to[/color] success.[/font][/size][/font]
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[font=Times New Roman]In addition,even people become trapped or into desperate situation, the
absence of choice
is still rare.[/font][font=宋体]　[/font][font=Times New Roman]Sylvester Stallone, a worldwide star, had been refused to participate in any film for that he was not handsome or "exellent "enough.After 500 failures, many people suggested that he had no choice but to give up his dream to be an actor. Nonetheless he succeed to be the hero in "Rocky" in respect of his persistence.[color=blue]Aother illuatration is Marie curie, the first laureate to win Nobel Prize in physics and chemistry. Her research on Radium was once interrupted several times for lack of expenditure and the bad lab environment. But she made extraordinary effort to overcome the difficulties. For them, the absence of choices is actually rare even in desperate situations.[/color][/font]
[font=Batang][size=10.5pt][font=Times New Roman][/font][/size][/font]
[font=Batang][size=10.5pt][font=Times New Roman]On the other hand, since we are in a democratic society,people have obligations while they have free will.For example,laws indicates that murder,theft and robery are all forbidden. Anyone who breaks the law would be punished severely. And it is of no choice to escape the responsibility for the [color=blue]democratic society. When it comes to the realm of scientific research, it is sometimes absent of choice to determine the results or the facts. For scientists, respect[/color][color=blue] to the facts and truth is profoundly significant. Therefore, they should not choose to alter the results in an experiment or a survey, they have no choice but to obey the truth.On those occasions, individuals ought to face of the absenbce of choices.[/color][/font][/size][/font]
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[font=Batang][size=10.5pt][font=Times New Roman]In summary, we can affirmatively claim that the speaker makes an reasonable conclusion in pointing out that the occasions of no choices are practically very rare in people's lives and study.However, other limitation should taken into account for that people have to stand by the rules and principles in ethics and laws. [color=blue]People have free will while have to obey the rules and principles. Absolute freedom does not exist in any democratic society. At some time, the absence of choice is acknowledged.[/color][/font][/size][/font]
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[font=Batang][size=10.5pt][font=Times New Roman][color=#0000ff]蓝色为自己修改的或没写完补充的[/color][/font][/size][/font]
[font=Batang][size=10.5pt][font=Times New Roman][color=#0000ff]还是超时间间了，加油，never give up,never give in[/color][/font][/size][/font]
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[font=Times New Roman][color=#0000ff]附上提纲[/color][/font]
[font=Times New Roman]Syllabus:[/font]
[font=宋体]第一段；[/font][font=Times New Roman]fundamentally agree with the assertion;however, it [/font][font=宋体]ｉｇｎｏｒｅｓ　ｓｏｍｅ[/font][font=Times New Roman] other occasions[/font]
[font=Times New Roman]2. Adimittedly,[/font][font=宋体]生活中我们都是有很多选择的，通向成功的方法有很多种，只不过有时不是最理想的，我们只需选择适合我们以及我们喜欢的的那一条。例如，例如选择上大学，如果一方面不成功可以尝试另外一方面，，[/font][font=Times New Roman]Oliva[/font][font=宋体]　[/font][font=Times New Roman]Ong[/font][font=宋体]　她原先长的是流行音乐并不受欢迎，后来该厂[/font][font=Times New Roman]jazz[/font][font=宋体]，就受到欢迎[/font]
[font=Times New Roman]3[/font][font=宋体]，即使是我们遇到了困难，面对绝境，我们的选择也不会没有，不想命运低头，，坚持下去，总会有成功的选择。例如：史泰龙[/font][font=Times New Roman]S[/font][font=宋体]ｙｌｖｅｓｔｅｒ　Ｓｔａｌｌｏｎｅ曾经因为不被电影导演赏识总被拒绝，后来经历了５００次拒绝后终于成功，出演Ｒｏｃｋｙ；[/font][font=Times New Roman]Marie[/font][font=宋体]　[/font][font=Times New Roman]Curie[/font][font=宋体]　研究很艰辛，但是选择自己的信念和决心，面对没有实验室没有经费的绝望境地，还是有选择的[/font]
[font=宋体]４[/font][font=Times New Roman].On[/font][font=宋体]ｔｈｅ　ｏｔｈｅｒ　ｈａｎｄ，很多东西的确是不能选择的。例如，法律，科学真理，错误，必须面对。例如：法律禁止[/font][font=Times New Roman]Murder,[/font][font=宋体]　ｔｈｅｆｔ．ｒｏｂｂｅｒｙ，一旦触犯，你哦[/font][font=Times New Roman]choice[/font][font=宋体]，接受惩罚；另外，面对科学真理即使不如我们所想所希望，但是必须尊重[/font]
[font=宋体]５[/font][font=Times New Roman].In[/font][font=宋体]　[/font][font=Times New Roman]summary[/font][font=宋体]，。。。。。。[/font]

达朗贝尔 发表于 2009-11-7 17:39

issue208

[font=Times New Roman]TOPIC: ISSUE208 - "The way people look, dress, and act reveals their attitudes and interests. You can tell much about a society's ideas and values by observing the appearance and behavior of its people."[/font]
[font=Times New Roman]WORDS:4[/font][font=宋体]16[/font][font=Times New Roman]
TIME: 00:45:00
DATE: 2009-11-7 17:15:06[/font]
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[font=Times New Roman]People's attitude and interests could be revealed by the way people look,dress and act . And you can tell much about a society's ideas and values by obsering the appearance and behavior of its people. To some extent, I agree with the assertion; however, the speaker unnecessarily extend the contention, and oversimplify the factors affecting the ideas and value of a society.[/font]
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[font=Times New Roman]On the one hand, it is generally acknowledged that on occasion people's[/font][font=宋体]　[/font][font=Times New Roman]costume , action
and appearance play a significant role in helping define their cultures as well as the value and ideas of their society.
The way they look,dress and act indicate their thinking and attitude towards the things around. For example,Water-splashing Festival of Dai ethnic group in China reveals their own unique culture and value of their society. During the festival, people often dress their traditional raiments and go to the square to splash water to each other. The rituals and ceremonies dedicate their thanks to the nature and the harmonious atmosphere, which define their value and ideas.[/font]
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[font=Times New Roman]On the other hand, however,people's attitude and interests revealed by their appearance and behavior couldn't tell much about the society's value and ideas. The speaker overstates the infections[/font][font=宋体]　[/font][font=Times New Roman]from people's attitude and interests revealed by appearance and behavior. With the development of global economy, the way people look, dress, and act are likely to tend to be similar. For example, people all over the world are addicted to the fashion tendency[/font][font=宋体]．[/font][font=Times New Roman]People are always following the characters of their idols, such as a super model, a famous superstar, or an actor. they imitate the way they dress and the way they talk. Therefore, it is imprudent to define a society on that occasion.[/font]
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[font=Times New Roman]In addition, a society's value and ideas are complex and more importantly, it is revealed by many other aspects besides people's appearance and behavior,[/font][font=Times New Roman]such as history, education,[/font][font=宋体]　[/font][font=Times New Roman]art, laws,[/font][font=宋体]　[/font][font=Times New Roman]politics, and so on. An illustration of this is the history of American Revolution and the[/font][font=宋体]　[/font][font=Times New Roman]Slavery War, both of them indicate freedom and democracy. Another one is the Renaissance, which revealed the humanism idea, and praised the genius of man and the unique and extraordinary of the human mind. [/font]
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[font=Times New Roman]In sum[/font][font=宋体]ｍ[/font][font=Times New Roman]ary, we can affirmatively claim that the speaker draw an reasonable conclusion in point out that the way people look, dress, and act reveals their attitude and interests, then they can represent the value and ideas of a society. Nevertheless, the speaker overrates the roles people's appearance and behavior play in determining the value and ideas ofa society. And it is necessary to take many other ingredients into account such as laws,education,art,history, which are admittedlyand practically indispensable in the definition of the society.[/font]
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[font=Times New Roman]时间到的时候，我还在扩写中间的事例呢，感觉还是打字速度限制了自己的表达。。不得已在写完后又花了十分钟的样子匆匆补完整，修改了一下拼写错误，其实觉得还有话想说但是。。唉。加紧练习！！！[/font]
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[font=Times New Roman]附上提纲：[/font]
[font=幼圆][size=14pt]208[/size][/font][color=blue][size=3] [b][b]the way people look, dress, and act reveals their attitudes and interests. You can tell much about a society's ideas and values by observing the appearance and behavior of its people.[/b][/b][/size][/color]
[font=宋体][size=3]人们的外表，衣着和行动表现出来他们的态度和兴趣。你可以通过观察人们的外表和行为来获知这个社会的思想和价值观。[/size][/font]
[color=blue][font=宋体][size=3]syllabus[/size][/font][/color][size=3][font=宋体][color=blue]：[/color]人们的眼神衣着和行动的确可以表现出来人们态度和兴趣但是只是根据这些还不足以来获知这个社会的思想和价值观而且其他方面比如文化和历史宗教可以来获知这个社会的思想和价值观[/font][/size]
[font=宋体][size=3]第一段　在一定程度上同意说法，因为不同的社会的思想和价值的不同可以通过外表和行动表现出来，但是夸大了其作用和角色。[/size][/font]
[size=3][font=宋体]第二段：　　　Admittedly，人们的外表衣着和行为体现态度和兴趣再而反映他们的文化和价值。例如：傣族人民的ｗａｔｅｒｉｎｇ－ｓｐｌａｓｈｉｎｇ　ｆｅｓｉｔｉｖａｌ，在节日那天人们放下忙碌的工作，穿上民族服，聚在广场，这种ｒｉｔｕａｌｓ　ａｎｄ　ｃｅｒｅｍｏｎｉｅｓ表现了他们群体社会的和睦和　崇尚自然；另外，西方的Hａｌｌｏｗｅｅｎ，人们会打扮的很吓人，达到娱乐的目的，这已是体现了美国社会的追求刺激和独特的一面[color=black][/color][/font][/size]
[font=宋体][size=10.5pt]第三段　　ｏｎ　ｔｈｅ　ｏｔｈｅｒ　ｈａｎｄ，但是在经济全球化的时代，各个民族和文化的人交流非常的频繁，相互影响，人们的外表服饰行为都越发的相似，这些不能够代表社会的价值和思想了。例如：潮流，服饰不再体现人们的思想。韩国服饰在中国很流行，但是可能大多数人对于它的文化了解，我们的文化思想并不会因此而改变[/size][/font][size=10.5pt][/size]
[font=宋体][size=10.5pt]第四段　　　[/size][/font][size=10.5pt][font=Times New Roman]in[/font][/size][font=宋体][size=10.5pt]　[/size][/font][size=10.5pt][font=Times New Roman]addition[/font][/size][font=宋体][size=10.5pt]要获得价值观和社会思想只是看行为和打扮是不够的，还有社会的思想文化更重要的不在于人们的外表，而在于其他。例如；法律，教育，科技，政治，艺术，还有历史文化。例如：美国的独立战争，美国的独立宣言，美国的[/size][/font][size=10.5pt][font=Times New Roman]slavery[/font][/size][font=宋体][size=10.5pt]　ｗａｒ，解放宣言　[/size][/font][size=10.5pt][font=Times New Roman]Emancipation[/font][/size][font=宋体][size=10.5pt]　[/size][/font][size=10.5pt][font=Times New Roman]Proclamation[/font][/size][font=宋体][size=10.5pt]　体现者美国社会的ｄｅｍｏｃｒａｃｙ　ｆｒｅｅｄｏｍ　的追求，还有[/size][/font][size=10.5pt][font=Times New Roman]Statue[/font][/size][font=宋体][size=10.5pt]　ｏｆ　ｌｉｂｅｒｔｙ　也是体现者如此。另外，文艺复兴时期的绘画，建筑，科学上的发展也是推崇的是[/size][/font][size=10.5pt][font=Times New Roman]humanism[/font][/size][font=宋体][size=10.5pt]――――　　　　[/size][/font][size=10.5pt][font=Times New Roman]praise[/font][/size][font=宋体][size=10.5pt]　ｔｈｅ　ｇｅｎｉｕｓ　ｏｆ　ｍａｎ　ａｎｄ　ｔｈｅ　ｕｎｉｑｕｅ　ａｎｄ　ｅｘｔｒａｏｒｄｉｎａｒｙ　ａｂｉｌｉｔｙ　ｏｆ　ｈｕｍａｎ　ｍｉｎｄ，这是体现者但是社会的发展和价值[/size][/font][size=10.5pt][/size]
[font=宋体][size=10.5pt]第五段　　[/size][/font][size=10.5pt][font=Times New Roman]In[/font][/size][font=宋体][size=10.5pt]　[/size][/font][size=10.5pt][font=Times New Roman]summary[/font][/size][font=宋体][size=10.5pt]，。。。。更重要的在于其他。。[/size][/font][size=10.5pt][/size]
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coxmyself 发表于 2009-11-8 01:26

coxmyself 发表于 2009-11-8 01:47

[font=Times New Roman]TOPIC: ISSUE136 - "The absence of choice is a circumstance that is very, very rare."
[size=10.5pt]WORDS: [/size][/font][font=Batang][size=10.5pt]４13[color=blue](改后523[/color]）[/size][/font][font=Batang][size=10.5pt][font=Times New Roman]
TIME: 00:45:00
DATE: 2009-11-7 10:46:48[/font][/size][/font]
[font=Batang][size=10.5pt][font=Times New Roman][/font][/size][/font]
[font=Batang][size=10.5pt][font=Times New Roman]Is the absence of choice is a rare circumstance? I fundamentally agree with the speaker for that we have free will and plenty of means to combat with troubles and difficuties in life in a democratic society. Nevertheless, the assertion overlooks the limitation for individuals to obey the rules.And examples from s[/font][/size][/font][color=blue][font=Batang][size=10.5pt][color=blue]ｃ[/color][/size][/font][/color][font=Batang][size=10.5pt][font=Times New Roman]ientific research and laws would aptly help clarify that.[/font][/size][/font]
[font=Batang][size=10.5pt][font=Times New Roman][/font][/size][/font]
[font=Batang][size=10.5pt][font=Times New Roman]Adimttedly,people are free of choices in daily life when facing a proplem.Many people often claim that they have no choices to overcome the obstacles. That is not the truth.[color=blue] Practically[/color], those people haven't found other means to resolve to problems ,or they
consider other choices unsuitable for them.An convincing illustation of this point is
Oliva Ong, a prominent singer, born in Singapore but appreciated by her fans who are addicted to jazz all over the world. At her first[color=blue] year in her singing [/color]career, she sang popular music
by didn't get known by many people.Then she met Bassa Nova, she found she was good at singing jazz and more importantly, her sweet and unique voice was [color=blue]absolutely[/color] different from others. Therefore,she made a choice to change which is compeling her [color=blue]to[/color] success.[/font][/size][/font]
[font=Times New Roman]In addition,even people become trapped or into desperate situation, the
absence of choice
is still rare.[/font][font=宋体]　[/font][font=Times New Roman]Sylvester Stallone, a worldwide star, had been refused to participate in any film for that he was not handsome or "exellent "enough.After 500 failures, many people suggested that he had no choice but to give up his dream to be an actor. Nonetheless he succeed to be the hero in "Rocky" in respect of his persistence.[color=blue]Aother illuatration is Marie curie, the first laureate to win Nobel Prize in physics and chemistry. Her research on Radium was once interrupted several times for lack of expenditure and the bad lab environment. But she made extraordinary effort to overcome the difficulties. For them, the absence of choices is actually rare even in desperate situations.[/color][/font]
[font=Batang][size=10.5pt][font=Times New Roman][/font][/size][/font]
[font=Batang][size=10.5pt][font=Times New Roman]On the other hand, since we are in a democratic society,people have obligations while they have free will.For example,laws indicates that murder,theft and robery are all forbidden. Anyone who breaks the law would be punished severely. And it is of no choice to escape the responsibility for the [color=blue]democratic society. When it comes to the realm of scientific research, it is sometimes absent of choice to determine the results or the facts. For scientists, respect[/color][color=blue] to the facts and truth is profoundly significant. Therefore, they should not choose to alter the results in an experiment or a survey, they have no choice but to obey the truth.On those occasions, individuals ought to face of the absenbce of choices.[/color][/font][/size][/font]
[font=Batang][size=10.5pt][font=Times New Roman][/font][/size][/font]
[font=Batang][size=10.5pt][font=Times New Roman]In summary, we can affirmatively claim that the speaker makes an reasonable conclusion in pointing out that the occasions of no choices are practically very rare in people's lives and study.However, other limitation should taken into account for that people have to stand by the rules and principles in ethics and laws. [color=blue]People have free will while have to obey the rules and principles. Absolute freedom does not exist in any democratic society. At some time, the absence of choice is acknowledged.[/color][/font][/size][/font]
[font=Batang][size=10.5pt][font=Times New Roman][color=#0000ff][/color][/font][/size][/font]
[font=Batang][size=10.5pt][font=Times New Roman][color=#0000ff][/color][/font][/size][/font]
[font=Batang][size=10.5pt][font=Times New Roman][color=#0000ff]蓝色为自己修改的或没写完补充的[/color][/font][/size][/font]
[font=Batang][size=10.5pt][font=Times New Roman][color=#0000ff]还是超时间间了，加油，never give up,never give in[/color][/font][/size][/font]
[font=Batang][size=10.5pt][font=Times New Roman][color=#0000ff][/color][/font][/size][/font]
[font=Times New Roman][color=#0000ff]附上提纲[/color][/font]
[font=Times New Roman]Syllabus:[/font]
[font=宋体]第一段；[/font][font=Times New Roman]fundamentally agree with the assertion;however, it [/font][font=宋体]ｉｇｎｏｒｅｓ　ｓｏｍｅ[/font][font=Times New Roman] other occasions[/font]
[font=Times New Roman]2. Adimittedly,[/font][font=宋体]生活中我们都是有很多选择的，通向成功的方法有很多种，只不过有时不是最理想的，我们只需选择适合我们以及我们喜欢的的那一条。例如，例如选择上大学，如果一方面不成功可以尝试另外一方面，，[/font][font=Times New Roman]Oliva[/font][font=宋体]　[/font][font=Times New Roman]Ong[/font][font=宋体]　她原先长的是流行音乐并不受欢迎，后来该厂[/font][font=Times New Roman]jazz[/font][font=宋体]，就受到欢迎[/font]
[font=Times New Roman]3[/font][font=宋体]，即使是我们遇到了困难，面对绝境，我们的选择也不会没有，不想命运低头，，坚持下去，总会有成功的选择。例如：史泰龙[/font][font=Times New Roman]S[/font][font=宋体]ｙｌｖｅｓｔｅｒ　Ｓｔａｌｌｏｎｅ曾经因为不被电影导演赏识总被拒绝，后来经历了５００次拒绝后终于成功，出演Ｒｏｃｋｙ；[/font][font=Times New Roman]Marie[/font][font=宋体]　[/font][font=Times New Roman]Curie[/font][font=宋体]　研究很艰辛，但是选择自己的信念和决心，面对没有实验室没有经费的绝望境地，还是有选择的[/font]
[font=宋体]４[/font][font=Times New Roman].On[/font][font=宋体]ｔｈｅ　ｏｔｈｅｒ　ｈａｎｄ，很多东西的确是不能选择的。例如，法律，科学真理，错误，必须面对。例如：法律禁止[/font][font=Times New Roman]Murder,[/font][font=宋体]　ｔｈｅｆｔ．ｒｏｂｂｅｒｙ，一旦触犯，你哦[/font][font=Times New Roman]choice[/font][font=宋体]，接受惩罚；另外，面对科学真理即使不如我们所想所希望，但是必须尊重[/font][font=宋体][/font]
[font=宋体]５[/font][font=Times New Roman].In[/font][font=宋体]　[/font][font=Times New Roman]summary[/font][font=宋体]，。。。。。。[/font][color=red]我感觉你的第一段和第二段有些重复。第一段的主题句可以写人是有自由意志，可以自己决定要干什么，进行选择。或是说不能选择都是相对的要看个人。对于一些智者具有可会变通选择多但是对于一些人来说就没有选择。还有速度一定要上去，写到500以上就可我感觉。这段时间要多写些。我打的时候是不怎么停顿的，有时停顿想想怎么写一个句子和怎么表达和单词怎么拼写。我感觉不能有太多停顿，每次停顿不要超过1分钟。[/color]

达朗贝尔 发表于 2009-11-8 09:51

第四次模考

[font=Times New Roman]TOPIC: ISSUE170 - "The surest indicator of a great nation is not the achievements of its rulers, artists, or scientists, but the general welfare of all its people."[/font]
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[font=Times New Roman]The surest indicator of a great nation is not the achievements of its rulers, artists, or scientists, but the general welfare of all its people. To some extent, I agree with the speaker; however, the assertion overstates general welfare of all its people contributing to the country, considering the nation's development. The assertion overlooks the relationship between the welfare and the achievements in science technology, art, politics, education, and legislation.[/font]
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[font=Times New Roman]First of all, In my viewpoint, it is necessary to make a definition of a great nation. People from different countries have respective perspective. Maybe most people consider their own country is the greatest in virtue of patriotism. Nonetheless, in the objective and historical perspective, a great nation is available to make outstanding and extraordinary contributions to the whole human society in many aspects.[/font]
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[font=Times New Roman]On the one hand, the general welfare of a country's people becomes available to be the surest indicator of the greatness of a nation, when the nation has become substantially developed in its economy, politics and cultures. For example, the welfare system in western countries, such as Holland, Sweden, Belgium and Germany, is appreciated by people all over the world for its advanced and systematic effect as well as its humanism. They have [/font]
[font=Times New Roman]good welfare in medical insurance, pension, and working is admittedly appropriate for its people so that people are generally content with their
lives. To contrast, the insurgence of Qing Dynasty in history of China was due to lagging welfare of people. The economy and politics developed fast but the rulers were cruel and cold-blooded to people. They built plenty of temples and palaces and promulgated the policy of high tax rate. People were always occupied with survival problems and their lives were specially miserable. Finally, they resisted, and the empire of Qing
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[font=Times New Roman]On the other hand, the development of a nation necessarily depends on the achievements of its rulers, artists, and scientists, while the
lasting general welfare must be established on the situation of its economy, politics, education, legislation ,and art. An apt illustration of this is the United States, which has super and prominent influence in the world for its democracy and welfare. It is acknowledged that numerous scientists ,economists, artists, and other great people in other realms come into being in the United States. They make extraordinary efforts to the development in science technology, humanism, environment, and cultures to the whole human. Computer was invented by scientists, and the Microsoft company founded by Bill Gates in America prodigiously contributed to the digital world. The research in biology and chemistry totally changed the medical treatments. Those achievements impel the development of its politics and legislation, then the welfare of its people naturally develops. Therefore, admittedly it's a great nation. Without the achievements of those great people, the welfare cannot develop.[/font]
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[font=Times New Roman]In summary, we affirmatively claim that the speaker make an reasonable conclusion in pointing out that the general welfare of a nation's people is the surest indicators of greatness on may occasions. However, it oversimplify the process of a country's development . General welfare of all people must rely on the sound basis of the achievements in science technology, economy, education, art, legislation, and cultures. [color=blue]Both the general welfare and achievements in science technology and politics, art, education are insignificant to the greatness of the nation. A country which promulgates advanced welfare while is lagging in technology and art, will not be likely to go further and its prosperity will not potentially last long.[/color][/font]
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[font=Times New Roman]晕～～有超时间::18 写完后放到word 里一大堆拼写错误。。。[/font]
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[font=幼圆][size=12pt]1.
[/size][/font][font=幼圆][size=12pt]在一定程度上同意，但是作者忽略了很多其他因素，因为surest indicator of a great nation 不仅仅是welfare，还有国家的政治经济法律制度，但是作者的观点过分夸大了welfare的作用忽视了，welfare和社会经济文化发展的必然关系，科技文学艺术很重要[/size][/font]
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[/size][/font][font=幼圆][size=12pt]首先有必要说明什么是一个 great nation ，在每个人心中必然是自己的国家是最伟大的处于爱国主义patriotism.但是从客观的历史角度来说，伟大国家必定是要对整个人类社会做出杰出的贡献的,国家强大伟大的指示在国家经济政治法制发展的基础上的。[/size][/font]
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[/size][/font][font=幼圆][size=12pt]on the one hand,[/size][/font][font=幼圆][size=12pt]在社会国家的仅仅文化发展到一定程度之后，welfare的确可以作为国家的强大的指示，从历史的角度看，社会文明发展到一定程度时候，相应的welfare也会做出改进，例如；现在的欧洲尤其是北欧国家，Holland， Sweden社会福利制度很完善，medical welfare, education welfare, pension welfare.人民满意度很高，社会秩序稳定；相反，中国秦朝虽然禁止文化政治发展，但是统治者不爱民，官逼民反[/size][/font]
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[/size][/font][font=幼圆][size=12pt]On the other hand, [/size][/font][font=幼圆][size=12pt]但是作者的观点过分夸大了welfare的作用忽视了，welfare和社会经济文化发展的必然关系。现在的福利制度好的发达国家都是经济发达的，民主的，法制健全，重视教育的。例如：美国,每年大量的科学家，经济学，艺术家，政治家，在全球有很大的影响力，他的welfare 也是很完善的，微软，生物化学研究。。。[/size][/font]
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[/size][/font][font=幼圆][size=12pt]In summary[/size][/font][font=幼圆][size=12pt]，。。。需要综合看，，，不能单看一方面。。若是不一国家统治者科学家艺术家的成就作为依托，社会福利再好也不会长久，国家会落后失去竞争力：而不重视welfare，社会便不会安稳[/size][/font]

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