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ghtlee 发表于 2007-4-18 13:25

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76.     Preparation for class
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Don’t let yourself fall behind. Staying with the front runners is easy.Getting back to the front after you have dropped backwards is extremely hard. One of the best ways to avoid falling behind is to prepare for class. Preparation for class (reading material ahead of time that will be addressed in class) is an important part of the learning process. It is also the basis for classroom learning as well. It is one of the elements to study efficiency and achieve good results. Some students mistakenly believe that the preparation for class is not necessary.They indicate that focus on what the teachers stress on the classes is enough, and they think preparing for class waste a lot of time. But, in fact, whose students, who spend a lot of time in learning and just ignore the preparation for class, usually can not get good grades because they easily forget what they learn after class.YL ft0U&x~~nMY
        Firstly, preparation for class increases efficiency of study in classes. We know what the difficult points are, what the key points are by previewing the context. The classes become more targeted and so we can concentrate our minds and focus on those points we couldn’t understand in our preparation.8]}*FH0`#[
        Secondly, we can do better classroom notes. We will take all notes whatever the teacher talk about and pay less attention to understanding the lectures if we do not prepare for classes. Sometimes we act only as a tape recorder-- we don’t have enough time to think, to summarize and to trim what we learn in class and out of class.
g!En%Pek"i         Thirdly, we can change our learning style from passive toactive when we find out the difficult issues and the main problems. We can follow the teachers’ though. We could also find out our weakness in knowledge, so we can remove the stumbling blocks in learning new knowledge and we will be able to focus our energies on key issues in understanding and reflecting the context. Understanding the class, we review our class easier and finish our homework faster. Although preparing the class spend some time. But in return, we increase our study effect by paying less time on our reviewing and doing homework.With time, we can improve our grade.
%zDR7W(R)w)k%WD         Fourthly, preparing for class can help us raise ourself-learning ability. The preparation itself is a self-learning ability. The knowledge students learn in school is only a small part of knowledge in the students’ lives. Most knowledge the people learn is from self-practice after they finish their schools. So theself-learning ability is very important and preparing for class is the best means to develop this ability. When preparing for class, the students read independently, think critically, find and solve problems independently and gain new knowledge by their own ways. In the process,students will gradually improve the ability to study.g'L)w-d3m0M8v]
          Fifthly, the students can consolidate memories by preparing for class. When students prepare for class, they are reading and thinking independently, and they deepen understanding the context whenin class. The memory effect is better than that simply relying on the lectures.G5{([2`'r A%nO2R
       So, how are we going to prepare for class?
;y-Z%`y8M j        First, we need to choose the propriety time. We usually choose free time after we finish our homework. We arrange how much we should prepare for class accounting to the period of time. If we have enough time, we are supported to prepare a little more and study in depth a little bit. (Conversely, we should spend our limited time on the weaker courses.)   $uy9Mr!H3es2o$B(X S
       Second, skim and scan the upcoming new learning materials. Distinguishing which is easy from hard in the context.
`sGMISB8W And then, with the problems, read the materials carefully and thoughtfully.(Reading speed can slow down on some difficulties—we can stop and search the content learned in the past, or search some related information in the internet.) Do not force to solve every problem by ourselves—some difficulties need to help in the class. QN$z.\(S
       Meanwhile, take notes when previewing—Highlight the key points or the difficulties, or make some marginal notations—otherwise, taking notes after finishing reading materials (course contents include thekey points, difficult parts, major issues talking about, logical links and the relations between them, etc.)y6lT/r6pdh0I
       Finial, different disciplines use different strategies for preparation.( According to the characteristics of the disciplines) For example, language courses should look up the new words, analysis the paragraph, thesis , writing style and approach; Math classes would focus on the mathematical concept and principles.(V.K'xm6]F2p0|j
          College gradates are destine to be self-directed and self-disciplined to a higher degree in order to achieve the long term goals and tasks that they will be expected to tackle in the future. Ifyou can't guide yourself through college, (gathering whatever support you feel you need), you don't deserve to graduate. Colleges are designed to weed out those who do not have that special drive inside of them. One needs to work hard when work needs to be done and without being told to do it. One needs to constantly prepare themselves for the next challenge. So, Prepare for class, study ahead of time: Give sometime to your studies. Make it as a habit to learn the lessons ahead of time. Once a final exam or short quiz is scheduled, this would be a breeze to you. fK8Tw xd
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ghtlee 发表于 2007-4-18 13:36

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3h(^4w k,g"S Throughout the semester, we have addressed a variety of issues concerning higher education, from defining a “liberal arts” education to examining how different disciplines view the world.  Through your two formal essays and in your blogs, you have addressed all of these issues, thereby adding your voice to broader discussions about the college experience as a whole.  Moreover, as we have noted throughout the semester, success at college depends upon much more than simply attending the required classes.  Success is difficult and demands that students alter or even create new patterns of behavior.  To help us explore these issues, we have read Cal Newport’s How to Win at College, which, as the language in its title suggests, speaks to the difficulties of college and the opportunities available to overcome these difficulties.  
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Here is the scenario for this assignment: Many readers of Cal Newport’s How to Win at College have contacted him and noted that although his book is helpful, it is still missing an important tip, one particularly geared to state schools and their troubling graduation rates.  Newport’s publisher is going to revise and republish his book, but before this happens, they have selected you to write one more tip.  For this assignment, you will therefore write the 76th tip for the updated version of Cal Newport’s book.  This tip should be geared specifically to students at state schools such as SSSS, and you can use your own experience at SSSS to strengthen your tip. However, this tip must not duplicate any of Newport’s 75 tips.  Feel free to refer to campus resources if they are relevant to your idea.  For example, if you argue that students should carefully hone their writing skills to succeed—an argument you will not make, since Newport already presents it on page 71—you might refer to the Writing Center, noting specifically how its tutors help students strengthen their writing.  This additional information about resources at SSSS should not take too much time to gather, but it can greatly enhance your argument.  
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Your tip should be at least three full pages long (much longer than Newport’s tips), although you may write as much as you wish.  It is due Monday, April 16 for peer review and you will submit the revised draft with your portfolio.

ghtlee 发表于 2007-4-18 13:48

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Peer reviewing allows you to help your peers write more cohesive, well-developed essays, and, in turn, this process allows them to do the same for you.  Even if you do not consider yourself a strong writer, or even if you disagree with the writer’s ideas, you can still offer valuable advice that would strengthen her or his essay.  On the days your essays are due, each of you will bring a copy of your paper for each member of your peer group.  Each person should read carefully the drafts of their peers and make written responses on the draft as well as on a separate sheet of paper according to the criteria below.  ?imc0qFvJ
Here are two points you might keep in mind when offering both written and oral responses to peer essays:  First, comments such as “good paper” and “I liked it” may boost the self-esteem of the writer, but they do not help very much when it comes to revision.  Try to make the responses specific to the essay so the writer understands and can respond to your comments.  At the same time, try to make your suggestions constructive.  Negative feedback such as “your thesis is pathetic” will only make the writer angry and defensive.  Positive or constructive advice will be much more beneficial to the writer.  On the day the revised essay is due to me, you will submit a folder that includes these drafts with your peers' written responses and your revised essay.
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Assignment: First, did the writer follow the assignment fully (page length, assignment topic, etc.)?nPkA"K0h

1Eg.c!rE(\X:P;G7p Development: As we have mentioned in class, you should develop each idea thoroughly by including a combination of general (yet fully explained) points and specific examples that reinforce these points.  For each body paragraph of the paper (not the introduction or conclusion) write the central idea in the margin and comment in the paragraph how the writer could strengthen this point (unless, of course, you believe the paragraph to be perfect as is).  For each paragraph, you should ask yourself the following questions and note your responses on the draft: Are the ideas developed so the reader can understand them without asking the writer to explain her- or himself?  Are there areas that could be better developed or expanded?  Is each idea supported with a specific example to support it?  Are the appeals the writer uses appropriate to the topic and audience?  Should the writer add information or an example to explain a point further?  Does each idea or paragraph support the thesis?  Does a paragraph contain more than one central idea?  If so, should the writer delete one or more of the ideas, or should s/he develop into their own individual paragraphs?mn(U+{0c
Organization:  Reread the comments you made in the margins reflecting the central idea of each paragraph, and list these comments, in order, on the back of the draft.  This list reflects the organization of the essay.  Below this list, respond to the following questions: Does this organization work?  Does the organization seem confusing?  Do the ideas flow smoothly from one paragraph to the next, or do the transitions seem "choppy"?  Would you reorganize any of the paragraphs?
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Thesis:  Without rereading the opening paragraph, write the thesis of this draft at the bottom of the last page.  That is, write what has the author argued throughout this essay.  After you write this thesis, return to the first page of the draft.  Identify and circle the thesis.  Did the writer articulate a point similar to the one you wrote below?  Is the thesis specific?  Is it manageable in the pages allotted?  Is it clearly identified in the essay?  Is it confusing?  What are the differences between the two?  Note on the draft how the writer might clarify her or his thesis./}Tk_LP!S3j X,B8I

t1ja M4d0w1U:s.v Argument: Underline at least one other viewpoint that the writer is arguing against.  Is this differing viewpoint clear?  Does the writer fairly summarize this differing position?  Does the writer clearly position her or his idea in relation to this other position?
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f'\x'u9B:K Style:  We have discussed issues of style and sentence structure during the semester, and I ask you to bring these discussions to bear upon your comments.  Circle or otherwise mark sentence- or word-level selections that need work.  Do all sentences make sense?  If not, how might you alter the sentence?  Should the writer combine, separate, or delete sentences?  Are there grammatical errors that caused confusion in the paper?  Does the paper demonstrate a unique "voice" of the writer?  Does the writer repeat words too frequently?  Does the writer incorporate the writing techniques (short sentences, proper appeals, etc.) that we have discussed?
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Final Comments: What were the strengths of this essay, and what areas need work?  List at least two of each.

ghtlee 发表于 2007-4-18 14:16

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