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求拍:Issue 130

求拍:Issue 130

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TOPIC: ISSUE130 - "How children are socialized today determines the destiny of society. Unfortunately, we have not yet learned how to raise children who can help bring about a better society."
WORDS: 573          TIME: 00:45:00          DATE: 2008-7-5 18:47:03

The statement indicates that the destiny of society is depended on how children are socialized. Furthermore, we have not known how to foster children to help bring about a better society. In my point of view, I do agree with it. The circumstance in the world nowadays can prove this point.

To begin with, the destiny of society means the future world. As the saying goes, "Children are the main force in the future." Children stand for the future. If we do not place enough emphasis on children, we will lose our future. Therefore, there is a growing awareness that how children educated and how they adapt to the changeable society is increasingly significant. That is, children need to be socialized and adjust themselves to the society. A full socialized child must have some qualities which are the society which has fierce competitions needs. Now the qualities such as frustration bearing and innovation and so on is showed by a well socialized child, instead, a lone wolf or a egoist is not welcome. Because well socialized children has the qualities the society needs, they help make the future of society better. Hence, how children are socialized dose determine the development of society. We need to pay more attention to education, especially socialization. How children are socialized dose determine the development of society.

However, children education is not an easy work. Firstly, what we cannot ignore is that the children and the society have interaction between each other, instead of simply one decide another. Children exert profound influence on society and at the mean while, society which is allegorically as a furnace has a great impact on children’s growth. That relationship make children's education become more and more complex.

Another question is that today's world cannot determine tomorrow because of many other factors which sometimes seem to be random and have no principle to follow. What a better society need is changed with the quickening tempo of modern life. Many years ago, maybe a silent and obedient child was consider an elitist, but now the definition of an "elitist " has changed. Instead of the ones who can only recite and memorize in a mechanistic fashion, today we need those who have more imagination and innovation. So what does future society really need? Who knows, maybe totally different from today? And we can only act as a guide for the children, conduct them into the society today, but how to create tomorrow would be difficult to predict, and that is the task of children to explore by themselves.Besides, by observing the education now, we can also see that our education system has not been mature. Therefore there is an important but difficult project in front of us. That is to say, we have a long way to go in children’s education. Besides, by observing the education these days, we can also see that our education system has not been mature. Therefore there is an important but difficult project in front of us. That is to say, we have a long way to go in children’s education.

To sum up, we can basically conclude that the way and extent children are socialized is the main factor that determines what the future of society is. However, for the factors for children's socialized is so complicated and confined by the present condition, people today are still confronted with difficulty in raising children for a better society.

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最近在看作文,也在准备写一些提纲和高频. 进来交流一下,为了多积累一些经验和写作的技巧.
该文评分的水平在3分左右,文章有一定的结构,但论述不足,第一段要好些,其它部分的论述偏简单和啰嗦不清,(sorry, personal view)
130为高频,偶认为命题的题旨是当今社会对下一代的的社会化教育对未来社会的影响,但未来社会发展的命运是好是坏却不是当代所能左右的, 是下一代人要面对的和负担的.

偶会选平衡观点:
Social education to our children in today's modern society is prominent for the destiny of the soceity in the future, in which our children will face and live.

The activities and events which are far reaching and have great impact on today people's live also will have important effect on our offsprings in the future society.

Whether  will the future society be better or worse can not wholely determined by today's social education. In a large part, It should be leaved our "future builder" to determine the road to a better society.

[ 本帖最后由 buniao 于 2008-7-27 11:05 编辑 ]

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